nice story, but you might want to recheck the spelling and grammar. also, why did you skip the smut? D:

i am a geek and i would like a boy :) preferably Sasuke...

LMAO XD i had to hold my breath for this XD very well written with a few mistakes that can be fixed so no biggie XD, love the disclaimer btw XD 'kinda rape' was a nice touch XD short and simple, i like it XD

Okaay seriously? You're 20, live in the US, and you're grammar is this shiity? Come on, seriously? proofread your shit, or get a beta.

period.

cute. this one made me go "aww"

Nice story!

Am sorry but this story sucks just as bad as your grammer and spelling, which by the way it A LOT haha. No, seriously...did you try to edit this? Cause it doesn't show in the least bit, and if you didn't even bother to edit then I don't feel sorry for flaming you cause you desvere it! Learn how to proof read. These errors are so damn annoying, especailly when it's through out the whole damn ( ) story.

Dude, really, I can't believe you live in USA, because your story lacks ANY kind of grammar. I mean you can't really speak with infinitives and tell the story with them either.

PAST TENSE? Where the hell is it?

And I'm not mentioning the capital letters yet.

Seriously - learn the language properly before writing stuff people will actually read.

that was super cute :3 i really really liked it!3

i like it, its nice, and should be a muli-chapter... but, you need to work on grammar and spelling. Also, you were moving too fast, there wasnt much of a development, or smex to be rated M. Like i said, its a good one, but you need to work on it to improve it. I think you can make a great fic out of this, just work on it.

aw, cute ]

cute.

wish it was longer 8~8

u should make a sequel

plz? G.G

i like it, i hope this isn't a oneshot. i'd like to read more. ]

This really needs to be proofread. It wasn't so bad for the first paragraph, but it got progressivelly worse and almost impossible to read. And this is all because of grammar and spelling. I have no real issue with the rest of the story.