great story! it took me what, 3 hours to read (i can get distracted pretty easily)? but heyho.

p.s-dunno if im getting stories mixed, but u spelled Wales as Whales. the way i spells right. sorry, but i just could help but say...if ur wondering why i know its coz i ve lived there 4 at least 7 years. sorry 4 the boredom! see ya! )

I love mindless self indulgence 3

Where my eel?

I liked this story a lot, going to read the sequel now! So yeah, Thank you for your hard work! 3

haha awesome story i loved it

excepppppttttt... it was kinda weird when my name is Bailey XD lol

but i tooooooottttttalllllllly LOV LOV teh story!

Great work! ]

ICP joke...

pf, It's so cute! Can't wait for the next upload.

I strongly suggest making your paragraphs smaller, it's hard for some people to read big blocks of text, and some people will just end up skimming through it because it's too hard to keep track of where they are.

There are some spelling and grammar errors here and there, and some things have unneeded spaces or punctuation, or they're capitalized when they shouldn't be.

I'd say use spellcheck, but with the Gorillaz and their British accents that would be a bit of hell to sort though, so all I can say is read through it more carefully or have someone help you edit or proofread it. Spacing it out into smaller paragraphs could make it easier to look at and find mistakes.

Overall though, it's a good plot, and I like where you're taking this story. I hope you update soon!

I'm probably the stereotypical Canadian. I say 'eh' alot, like maple syrup... I also live in an igloo. :D

I'm exited to see what you've got planned for this story. I only noticed one or two spelling mistakes, but only small ones that are easy to miss.

Keep up the good work!