You appear to have conned Orson Scott Card into writing Death Note fanfic. Great story and the tone is just perfect. Not sure what it is about the story, but it makes me think of Light in the Ender-verse. Possibly the title and the priest. Whatever it is, great story!

"You wouldn't believe it"

I LOVE that line :D

Great job on the fanfic

Interesting premise, but what would Light feel guilty over that his conscience would trouble him at all? He believes he's doing the right thing, or at least that the ends justify the means; it's not a case of being stronger than his conscience's punishment, but of his actions being in accord with his conscience. Neither do I understand why Light 'didn't care' to be decorous, since he always keeps up a mask of perfection.

Tips: A lot of your dialogue is missing end punctuation, and you don't need to capitalise following words; Yagamis as plural doesn't have an apostrophe; "Here us Lord" should be "Hear us Lord"; rather than "a lot different", it's less alienating to use "very different"; and Light goes from being "utterly bored" to "a little bored" paragraphs later. Also, it's only an inside joke if the priest knows Light is Kira. Just saying.

However, the theme of moral dissonance did come across pretty well; Light being contemptuous and dismissive of normal ideas of right/wrong. Intriguing stuff.

Lights JAPANESE. He's not a Christian and I highly doubt there are many churches in Japan. Also, try to hold back on the punctuation. There is no need...For so many periods and exclamtion points!

YAY! I loved it :3

The writing was great, I think I caught one or two misspellings total, and... yeah, this was good. Most people don't write things like this, and I enjoyed it thoroughly!

*Thumbs up!*