Really liked this; I like that it is well written and I'm not being distracted by blatant run-ons/fragments/poor dialogue punctuation.

I can understand what the previous reviewer said about the "meandering feel," and slow-ish plot, but I didn't find it bothersome as the detailing all seemed story-relevant.

Putting it on my alert list, incase you decide to continue.

I like your poetic writing style, it's very rich with metaphors. One suggestions is that, while you write very well, you might want to make the tempo of your plot a little faster. You spent a whole chapter writing about stitches, and while there was some dynamic character development towards the end that I enjoyed, the middle had a very meandering, speculative feel. A faster plot will catch and hold people's attention, giving them just enough to want more. As is, I know you have a beautiful writing style, but I'm not quite sure where the plot is going and it's chapter 2 (will this be purely character development, will there be an action/comic aspect of the plot, other characters, etc?). However, that's just a suggestion from someone who's been conditioned by the fast pace of movies and comic books. Lean and mean, etc. :)