Why would you hit someone out of embarrassment?

I thought Sakura was done hitting him no?

I could understand most of her reasoning, except the hitting. She could have easily done without that and still kept up the facade yes? So why evolve to hitting him if she supposedly likes him that much?

I'm sorry

Well this was interesting so that's it huh nice story I wonder who Ino likes not that it matters although I'm curious maybe not even a boy lol not the first time Ino likes girls lol anyways great story

Well that was different but cool

Well that was nice funny also Sakura using her brain to see the truth that Sasuke was actually Naruto, nice kiss and talk also It's cute actually wonder what happens next should be funny seeing Sasuke's reaction to Sakura not liking him at all would he be shocked not not care knowing him probably not bothered at all still should be good

Cool

AWWWW

Burke approves

I personally liked it very much
as you can probably tell by my name i am a HUGE NaruSaku fan and i liked it but i think it could have ended better

Advice: Don't put A/Ns in the middle of anything, and never admit you don't know how to spell some Japanese whatever. Most people won't know, and the people who know and care enough to notice will tell ya. In any case, people spell a lot of things different ways, and if you care that much, go look it up on Narutopedia.

Try italicizing instead of underlining for emphasis. More professional-looking.

In English class they might tell you to write long paragraphs, but trust me, no reader wants to go through a wall of text. Try to keep paragraphs 5 lines and under.

About the story... Your reasoning for Sakura loving Naruto is a hard argument to uphold. You did well, but... Okay, they're only 12, you know? It's an interesting idea, though, and best of luck with it!

Also, thanks for your fave ;)

Loved it. I would ask to take over, but I suck at writing :( and btw, when you said you lacked the 'writing talent', you are totally wrong, you actually have tonnes of it. This story was really good. Have you ever read a fanfic where the author doesn't put in capital letters, paragraphs, full stops, commas, or has a whole bunch of spelling errors? Yeah. THAT is a bad author with no writing talent.

i forgot again my password.. dont hate me.. just much thing had pass (work, family, virus.. stupid virus... computer virus..) ok to busisnes.. dont stop had be original what you doing and is sad you stop it like that or tried to change wiht others poeples, i mean was good how is going

but if you send me a pm (same nickname) i may read it to my email, and for future information i will leave the fist 3 chapter like that and continue in the 4 wiht news ideas

ok need to go (not my omputer lol)

see ya :D

You should realize that there's a large percentage of people who only read completed work ... so when you post something as completed, guess what? IT SHOULD BE COMPLETE. Now if you want to drop a story, that's fine, as they say here on the island, "I no care." But when you change your listing to completed you should have the courtesy to list it as INCOMPLETE, or DISCONTINUED, DROPPED, ETC!

And it's not like I loved your story, but that I read things, even awful things, usually to the finish. It's just sort of a thing. Your story was going okay and in a unique direction; too bad you pooped on us.

~JSM