I don't like the start, because i don't think something like that could really happen. But later story becomes better.

So Im really sick, ya?
And this fic is really depressing. .
Now Im shivering and crying.

a very nice story! i really enjoyed it!

Okay. Once again forget what I said I guess cause that was pretty good for an ending I didn't think you'd go for that route (how Ed apologized when they were younger)
It was nice though I suppose, it works for them.

Forget every review by me please. They were written with the help of my IPods incompetence when it comes to typing and my own sleep deprived, induced stupidity (if that makes any sense: great. If it doesn't: it only proves my point)

Anyways I really liked the story you have provided and I just wanted to thank you for writing it.

I know I said before I hated it when Ed apologizes in these stories, but I meant I hate it when he apologizes for nothing and Al doesn't apologize even if it was his fault.

If Ed feels blame then yeah I guess he should say sorry, but I need Al to say 'No Brother. I'm sorry" I need him to acknowledge his mistakes because if he doesn't it's to much like the real world (that's supposed to be a good thing isn't it?) and I hate it! Some of my "friends" pull that stunt on me and I never realize it until about a week later when I'm thinking back on it and I'm too much of a wuss to actually come out and say it (not like they'd agree with me. They'd accuse me of being a bad friend then we'll argue then I'll cry and then the next day I apologize they "generously" forgive me and then the cycle repeats) that's my issue with that though...

Bleeehhhh no one ccaaaaaarrrrreeeeeesssss! Sorry again for my babbling that spawns from tiredness

Wow Al is smart! Good going guy! (triple g)

I know I said I wouldn't review, but then I felt bad so now I am, despite what I said, giving tiny insignificant reviews which is almost as bad if not worse than no review... Sorry.

And I'm crying

(Sorry for the pointless reviews)

Huh... Guide on how to fake sickness, good to keep in mind. I guess it'd either have to be at a really convenient time when you haven't been getting any sleep, or if you're planning on getting out of something then you can just not sleep for a while... I'm good at that, so good that my friend became really worried one tome and made me go see a doctor 'cause she thought I was developing Insomnia. Even when he said I was fine she would still call and visit to check up on me and see if I was sleeping or not. It's kind of funny in my opinion. Luckily she's finally let it drop.

Oh joy... The personal stories that leak out of me when I'm tired, they're truly the best things ever. Not a waste of anyones time in the slightest... And I always forget that I can just back space like I did this time. But since i've wrote all this junk if I erase it then I feel like I wasted my time more than I already think I did.

Oh god anyways good as the other chapters, I don't think I'll review again until the last chapter I'm tired and feel lazy right now. Unless I absolutely have to comment on something...

Jesus! You just don't quit with the awesomeness! Him hallucinating that part of his life was written well and the part when the fever went down he was back to himself, but the fever wasn't quite broken yet so he collapsed back into a not entirely perfect mental state was cool too.
And the OC is surprisingly good. I usually hate OCs with every fiber of my being but she's not bad.
Also I finally looked up when Invective means and I have to say that it's a very clever title. The meaning is simple and sums up how the whole situation got started and it's an interesting word it's not like you titled the story "Arguments" or anything, so good on you for the cool title

OHHHHHHHHHH It was! And thats why!
Ohhhhhh!

I don't know what I had expected, but apparently it wasn't Roy, because for some reason that shocked me quite a bit.

And that's what good writing does to people :)

Hmm, I wonder where exactly Ed is right now...

I'm also glad that you made Al understand his mistake (like Al would) I've read other stories where something happens, Al mistakenly says something completely uncalled for and then at the end of the story it's Ed who apologizes, Al who forgives him and then they go on with their life and it really ruined those stories. I was angry, to say the least.

So thanks for that :)

Oh my god. Wow.
I seriously don't know what to say, that was unexpected. I didn't expect Al to be the one to EVER say that.

Dammit, you caught me off guard and now I've got tears in my eyes, maaaan. But to be perfectly honest I love it when that happens I hate reading fics with predictable this and predictable that. It's great when you actually are affected by stories, it's good for immersion I guess.
So great job, the first chapter has sucked me in

I truly loved this story. It didn't seem rushed or forced at all. It almost made me cry at times because I'm a sucker for a sob story and aww poor little Ed. It surprises me sometimes how neither the anime or the manga ever really got into the self-hatred and obvious emotional turmoil Ed had to go to, other than a few references to his automail surgery and when he first joined the military. I loved the way you repeated those lines from the first chapter at the end of this one. It was very poetic, and it gave the story a well-rounded ending, showing how far he had come since the beginning. He didn't magically feel better about everything, because life doesn't work that way, but he decided to keep moving forward instead of wallowing in self-pity. I also liked the ending and Ed's apology, because I can't really see either of them having a dramatic, emotional scene in public like that.

If its finished, why doesn't it say complete?
*facecomputer*
. . . .
Now I need a new screen. . . .

I'm crying and awwwwing at the same time! :') that was so sweet! ANGSTY GOODNESS! nice job!