Wow...
Just wow...
I've been here looking for a perfect story to read, and I stumbled across this. You my friend have the talent of Suzanne Collins! The imagery, the emotive language, the metaphors, everything about this work was sophisticated and astounding to read!

I love the way how you incorporated the darker side of Carlos. It engaged me to continue reading this. Your application of a mental health problem and how it has impacted him really tugs the heart strings. What I really like is that when he and Logan are together, he doesn't completely recover, unlike other fanfics which have incorporated this countless times. (The reason why it has exasperated me is that as I am still recovering after a year of treatment of a mental health problem and I still struggle quite a bit with recovery)

The vivid imagery is astonishing! The audience is able to view where Carlos is and the scenario. Character development was perfect, everyone was in character, nothing that made them out of character.

Well done, you should be very proud of this story. Keep it up, because it is writing like yours that makes it big.

Allen :) :)

Great story, perfect amount of angst

this mad me cry omg it's sooo beautiful :3

THIS WAS FANTASTIC! OMGGGGGGGGGG! I love story! Just, UGH. Perfect Carlos Angst, and Cargan and Kames and AHHHH!

OMB! That was so great! U r like an amazing writer! Like super amazing! I LOVE it! Its so sad but like so touching!

Hi there!

Wow, this was a beautiful and heart-wrenching story, well written and touching. I was looking for something 'good' like this for some time and now I have found it. Despite the 'heaviness', angst and heartbreaking of it, this saved my day.

I don't know how to put my feelings and thoughts into words about this, 'lighter fluid', properly because I suck at it, simple as it is. I'm sorry. But I am able to set writings apart from other writings, especially when a stoty touches my "heart, mind and soul" and not only/just my interests, and 'lighter fluid' did the first. One day after reading this, this story still lingers within my thoughts and makes me re-feel all the feelings I had through the story, it really is beautiful.

I have read only one of your writings so far but I think you have lots of talent (and you are still so young!) and I can see all your heart's blood in this and I thank you for all the efforts and I even more thank you for sharing this!

I wish you a wonderful day and lots of Muse kisses!

Best regards, Faelis

Absolutely. Brilliant.

Oooh this is really good I have never written a 45 page story in my life maybe half that and it was no where near as good. Gah I fail at writing compaired to this in fact -maybe if I wasn't so dang lazy I'll work on that heh- I really liked this and the other story to which I read a couple months or something like that ago. It was a classic corny he realized he liked him and jumped him on the couch and they lived happy ever after which is lame -well ok maybe not lame but there's better- this just seemed so much more naturaly and real and I rather liked ur OC she wasn't Mary-sue ish to me at all.

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I didn't review this the first time I read it! God! I'm so stupid, I swear.

Anyway. Actually...I don't know how I'm supposed to review this. Because this is hands-down the best fanfiction I've ever read, on any fandom. And I've been on this site a while, let me tell you...

As for specifics...I love how you made an OC I didn't wanna kill and actually admired. (I hate OCs most of the time.) I loved the whole "Kendall-and-James-left-us-behind" thing because I've read a lot of fanfics on this fandom where two of the members decide to date, and the other two are like "Kool, we still like you and everything's normal." When it's so unrealistic to think so. I love Carlos' idea of self-destruction, because I'm going through a lot of crap right now, and those lines kind of just...I loved them. I thought the dream sequence was insanely eerie and creepy in a fantastic way. I love a good dream sequence (as odd as that sounds). Oh, and where Carlos says that he's not gay, he just fell in love with a boy. I HEART THAT. Besides the last line, that's probably my favorite. And the way you describe nighttime LA - broken dreams and all.

Also, I've read this and broadway's dark tonight, and it's weird, but I like this better. And I say that because Kames is my OTP. (But Cargan is a close second, mmkay?) You are beyond a beautiful writer. What's odd is you seem so modest about it. (Which is hard to be sure about considering that all I have to go by are your profile and your A/Ns, but...) You seem a lot like me in the sense of complete curiosity about life, and a better understanding of it than most people. The difference is that you can write, and you're lightyears away from where I am, writing-style-wise.

If James' or Logan's stories will be anything like this, then...I'll be desperately awaiting them, mmkay? I wish I could express how much I liked this in words. But that would take a writing skill as powerful and intense as yours, and I don't have that.

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I swear to god, you've just killed me. You've left me spent and dead and lifeless and broken and god-only-knows-what-else on my bedroom floor.

This. Was. FANTASTIC.

Amazing.

Spectacular.

SO FLIPPING WONDERFUL that my mind isn't coherent at the moment. I... I physically can't think of anything to say to you other than thank you. From the bottom of my heart, THANK YOU.

I need to go recover from the sheer brilliance that is this fic now, so I'm sorry I can't leave a deeper review.

And why aren't you on my favorite author's list yet? I absolutely adored broadway is dark tonight when I read it all those months ago, and I know it's been in my favorites ever since.

But oh god, thank you again. For being amazing. And writing this.

Really, thank you /insert heart text here

OMG I LOVE THIS IT TOOK ME LIKE AN HOUR TO READ IT BUT ITS AMAZING!

Only two stories have ever brought me to tears so completely. This is one of them. Carlos is so breathtakingly deep, and the way that you describe the love that these boys share for each other is unimaginable, but somehow you manage to do it so well. And Manuela. Beautiful, sweet Manuela. She is a girl that makes me wish that I weren't gay.

I LOVED IT! Dude, that was wow words can't describe how awesome this story is. It was the pick-me-up I need and I loved it. Please make more I love the way you write. MORE MORE MORE!

Dalton