You write really eloquently, and I really admire that. It's good to have an artistic feel to your work, but sometimes it can be a lot to process and therefore some readers, probably less focused ones, may not get the significant points.

This is one of the best stories I have ever read. I think you deserve more reviews and that shit. But, sadly, I am only a guest that is too lazy to make an account. So, needless to say, I love this story and will support u. UPDATE SOON!

I love it so please update again soon x

WOW! I have no other words, this story is just splendiforous in every aspect.

I love this story! Update soon!

Interesting your child is a original character, I'm curious as to what'll happen next.

I found it hilarious that before I even started my story 'Unfrozen' I read your story! I really liked it and should have reviewed but decided against it due to being a bit shy on the internet! Is it ironic that the one who is reviewing and helping me on my story was my inspiration to write the story in the first place? I sure think so! Just goes to show you how one little thing such as reading a story can start a chain reaction! Anyways onto my thoughts of your story! I really like the fact that your OC characters have depth instead of just being there! Because if you ask me I hate it when the OC's are tooo perfect! The fact that she has her human traits and is still a bit clumsy and naive at some times makes the story oh so much better! One tip (or rather thought/opinion that you don't have to listen to) I rather enjoy flashbacks but if they get too long it gets the reader a bit impatient to get back to the real deal... and that is not a good thing because impatient skipping over important stuff! It would be terrible if they missed something dreadfully important only because they skipped past it in a hurry to get to the end! So I suggest maybe cutting out a bit of the extra things that are not as important in the flashbacks! It makes it much more enjoyable, gets the point across, and gives you more time to focus on the story! And if it absolutely must be long then maybe take the one long flashback and make it many short ones? Hope I helped in any way and I also hope I didn't offend you because that was not my intent! I hope we can both continue reading, reviewing and criticizing each others work! Thanks so much and please update soon! OH! and sorry for rambling so much in this review! PM message me if you would like to discuss story ideas, methods, outlines, styles or even just as your thoughts on my review! :)

Still a few grammatical errors, but that's okay. Really cute so far! I like the wittiness and humor as well as your character development. You've got a great story. Keep going, babe! :)

I am a little confused. How old is she physically? It says 2 or 3, but that would mean that she would have been 2 or 3 when she was changed. When we went through her memories, though, the way she talked to her friend Sophia seemed too mature for someone so young. And since when do kids know so much about love? I'm pretty sure when I was that age I was still scared of boys. Also when the church people come to take her, they hit her a couple times but since she's so little, you'd think that she would be knocked out after just one kick to the head. Please clear this up? You can PM, or answer in the next chapter, whatever works.

I've subscribed to everything and joined the site! Keep up the good work and let me know if you need any help in the future. I'm eager to read more of your work!

fantastic chapter and i can not wait to read more of it as soon as you can write it please and thank you

OMG it was so good. you should write more. like really alot more except i have one suggestion for you don't make your chapters so short and if you can't help it combine two or three chapters together trust me it'll be soooo much better!

this chapter is amazing! I would love to read the end plz finish the story!

great story.

I RLY WANT JANE AND KARTIK'S STORY! cant wait...!