YAYYY. HALE!ANGST!

Considering the fact that I love Hale, this was perfection. I love Hale, I love angst. What more is there to say?

-Ariana xx

It is pretty good. i just found fan fiction but yours is one that had the most in character characters.

i feel real bad for hale and all i wish his parents could at least call him every once in a while. at least he has the bishop. :)

You captured Hale's character pretty well. While reading the book, I kept imagining what it would be like to have your parents leave you for months at a time.

Great job. :)

muy bueno, chica! Tus historia es muy interesante! ;)

it's great to see some background on the ever-mysterious W. W. Hale the fifth

Nice job. Hale seems to be in character, and it really puts his personality in good light. Very well done. *bows low*

~Oceanfire :D

Very nice story. I loved Hale's character.

nice

me gusta mucho. mas! mas! ... is that how you say it... whatevs.. more! more!

*applause* Loved it! You seem to capture his attitude pretty well. :)

Write On!

Ray

That was cute. :) I love how he considers the thief family more his own than his blood parents. Totally on the spot, absolutely awesome job. :D