I got so happy when I realized who they were fighting because I know who helps them!

Well that was adorable.

That was a sweet story

Your story is so great and definite deserves more reviews :)

Great fic! I almost passed this up thinking I would hate it. I am glad I gave it a chance! I have never read anything like this. Write more Shikamaru & Temari fics please. :)

kyaaaaa the ending was so...kyaaaa I loved it...!

Awesome

Very sweet, kinda fluffy at points. Doesn't stay true Western theme for the most part, and nearly everyone is OC (though that may've been your intention). A rather short story for 10 chapters but it was spaced perfectly, so I can't complain. While I typically don't proofread anything over 2 or 3 chapters, no errors stuck out to me while I was reading it so that's really good enough for me.

Overall, I'd give this 5/10. A fun read, but not really Western, rather short and doesn't really have a big plot.

Thanks for your time. ~YellowThunder.

Very sweet, kinda fluffy at points. Doesn't stay true Western theme for the most part, and nearly everyone is OC (though that may've been your intention). A rather short story for 10 chapters but it was spaced perfectly, so I can't complain. While I typically don't proofread anything over 2 or 3 chapters, no errors stuck out to me while I was reading it so that's really good enough for me.

Overall, I'd give this 5/10. A fun read, but not really Western, rather short and doesn't really have a big plot.

Thanks for your time. ~YellowThunder.

I enjoyed that welldone my favourt part was Temaris morality crisis about all the people she's killed it was realistic and provided character dephth, however I didn't really understand what Garra did to get locked up.

That was such an great story the ending made me happy. It was a really good happy ending :D

the ending's kinda cute. i like it.

very cute story and also very good too!

The ending was lovely. A job well done!

I love western stories. You got a good thing here keep it up.