Oh wow! Didn't see that coming! Still all NanoFate stories are wonderful reads to me. Thanks for writing one.

Sweet. looking forward to read more of your stories!

Nice job! love this~

i know why Raising Heart does not alarm anyone of Fate's presence, it's because when she saw Fate she'll think of Bardiche xD

um short pls continue

this was really awesome! such a good idea. i love it that fate would sneak in, even during the time of their first fight! thanks for the one-shot. happy V day!

Heh, well you certainly know how to draw me in. The conflicting pairing listing intrigued me so I gave it a read and as is my policy, I review what I read.

From a technical standpoint everything is nice. Your grammar, spelling, flow, etc is all very good. However, the actual events are rather unbelievable. Now, just hear me out: this takes place in season 1, right? I don't think the Fate during season 1 would do something like this as she doesn't consider Nanoha an important person until after the thing with Precia when she learns the value of friendship.

I think this whole event would fit much better if it took place in A's. Fate, who is staying at Lindy's place on Earth, wants to see Nanoha so she sneaks out like you have here. That would work a lot better.

So nice fic, but I think it happens too soon chronologically.

So cute! And it's the 1.0th fic!

Dude. Congratulation on being the 10th story! Great story by the way. Nanoha X Fate forever! X3