Akako?

That was nice. I myself loves sweet but not too sweet.

I would say it was Akako who said it 'cause it looks like something she would say xD

Anyway, cute story!

Wow, I really liked this! And don't we all love the way penguin writes? You're right, it really sounds like she knows Kaito.. I'm going to get that out of her someday.. :P

Anyways, some of the lines in here were very good, and I don't think we all realise just how protective Kaito is of Aoko, so good job! I especially liked that last line, "But Kuroba, I hope you realize that too much sweet hurt your tooth…"

Just a question though, is this oneshot in anyone's point of view, by any chance? Or just your own?

Don't need to be sorry about your grammar mistakes, the more you right, the more you'll improve on it! So great work, and keep writing!

I thought it would be cute little oneshot... But it wasn't little. I think that your oneshot is one of the examples hom many contains can be in not so much amount of words...

I do like that. It contains an essence of Kaito. And whatever else could be written about Kaito is like dilution of that essence in the liquid made of words.

Well who could say it...? At the beginning I thought that it might be Kaito, who in some point of his life feeling a little bitterness, has a discussion with his conscience... Like he found in situation when he has to regrett being like he was, and his internal voice point out his own decissions and it was saying: "It's your own fault, you forget that too much sweet may hurt your tooth."

But I think that this little sarcasm fit also to Saguru or Akako.

Anyway I think this "little" oneshot is a piece of good work, it was nice to read it.

Wow... this is... well, I don't know what to say, really. But I think your summary summed it up (very nicely so, too):

"You are a sweet man. A very very very sweet Kuroba, I hope you realize that too much sweet hurt your tooth."

This is. Lovely. I like the tone of this. A lot. At first I was lulled into a false sense of "aww..." but then the bitter, slightly sour undertone begin to surface a few lines later.

"oh…sorry, you do care, you just choose to enjoy the pain for pretending not care."

Me thinks it could be Hakuba - because he's cynical that way. And he seems to be the type to watch things from afar, observing and judging quietly in his mind. My bet's on Hakuba. D

Overall, a very nice fic. Your grammer has improved greatly.

(And thank you for the lovely comments in the beginning . *quietly sneaks under a box to hide her blush*)