Okay, I tried to read this story as well as others by you because they had such great potential... but oh my god I CANNOT continue because what in the everloving fuck are “HAZELS”? Literally what the hell is that? Who uses those to describe eyes? If someone’s eyes are blue or purple or black would they be “blues”, “purples”, or even “blacks”? When you repeatedly started using “hazels” it made me do a double take to realize that you were trying to just describe a pair of fucking eyes, which you could’ve said to begin with. Sorry but because you weirdly used this word so many times, it just became an overwhelmingly glaring distraction and I could not take it anymore to the point where I had to stop reading just to write this review. I tried to like your stories, I really did, but wow I could not stand reading this fucking “word” any longer, especially since it popped up so damn often. If you read this, please refrain from describing a pair of eyes as just a color with an S added at the end as it is uncomfortably distracting and makes no sense.

Thank you for sharing this story and for sticking it out until it was finished (better a somewhat rushed ending than an incompleted story). The premise was so interesting and I loved the idea of Kagome possibly being replaced and resented. So much juicy drama! The introduction of a new type of demon was good fun too. Overall a good read that was well written with only a handful of typos (mostly mixed up he/she pronouns). Thanks again for sharing! 3

Omg so much SPN influence here! Nicely done though.

Just wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed your story - I have finished it all in one night! What a compelling fan fiction! I just had to keep reading, to know that somewhere along the line InuYasha, Kagome, Miroku, Sango and the rest would get at least some semblance of a Happy Ending. I was so pleased to read that, overall, a "gateway" of sorts to happier times ahead was there for nearly all of them. What can I say? A bit of angst and drama is great, but it's nice when everything comes together for the better at the end.

Thank you so much for your story! I will most definitely be reading more of your work!

Well, I do love the story as a whole, but I have to agree that the ending did seem very rushed. First Kagome was pregnant then in less than a chapters length you decide to kill off the baby, which actually might have still been fine had Inuyasha participated in the "final battle" (if you could call it that) in the first place. Also, it seemed strange how Azazel suddenly decided to abandon Damian's body, which he's been perfectly content with using throughout the whole story, for Lilith's right before the big battle just so he could attempt to retrieve a knife that Kagome probably wouldn't have ever had the courage to use had he still been using Damian's body in the first place. Also, you never discussed Azazel's purpose for bring back Kikyo and Inutaisho, if anything it almost seemed like those two characters, along with a few others were just plain forgotten about in favor of ending the story as fast as possible. I'm sorry, because, like I said, I really do adore your stories. You have such a great talent for coming up with interesting plot lines and I love you for it, but I have indeed noticed that you seem to decide to either completely delete/abandon or rush through many of your stories quite often. Something that would be fine if you were just setting them up for a sequel, but it seems a tad disappointing otherwise. I hope you don't too much offense to this review, I'm just trying to be honest and tell you hat I've observed in the past. Not all of them are that way, for instance, I think that Damned Deed, another story of yours that I love, was ended pretty nicely and I greatly enjoyed reading it from start to finish. I apologize if any of what I said above offended you in any way wish you luck with your future works! I've recently been reading "The Massacre & The Masochist" and it seems like it has a great deal of potential. I'm excited to see where you'll be taking it!

Hi. I vary much liked this story and was wondering I could maybe... Make a sequel? See the thing is you left a lot of loose ends that I can work with, like inuyasha's dad, ayame and her child. Rin. Miroku and Songo...

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I know what u mean about writing a story that takes forever to write. I'm writing 1 write now. It's called roses. I'm inuyashasgirlfriend1 I'm a member on here. Lofl I love ur story. Please, write more!

Well, I just finished your story and would like to say I enjoyed it. Although I think if you kept more to the standard story line then it would have been better. Sometimes, we try to make the stories so complex that we almost lose ourselves in the story. I am confident that a good outline would have made your story perfect.

I wish you well.

8.5/10

I guess we won't see you around anymore, huh? I must say that it saddens me greatly that you won't write anymore, but I understand that you have your reasons. The only thing I'm asking ( more like begging, really) is that you don't delete your work, not even the unfinished stories. It's hard enough that is loosing one of it's best writers, leave us at least the stories, pretty please?

Thank you for all your stories, and I hope that when you look back you will only remember the good times you had while writing.

Wish you all the best,

redstring2703

Your last chapter just ruined the entire story. It seems like you are tired of writing it and just wanted end it prematurely. If you still had passion for this story you wouldn't have ended like this. This story should not have ended like this. Personally I think you are about halfway of how it should have been. Why would you just end like this after all of your time and effort.

This reminds me so much of Supernatural. I Love it so far, cant wait to see what is going to happen next.

that story was, let see, not as good as Damned deed but great all the same

Been reading this along the past few days, and I really loved it. It's a shame that you didn't get a lot of reviews- not that 300 isn't a great number, but this fic deemed worthy of way more.. you got nominated for a poll at the FA- Congrats! That's actually how I found this fic, in my emails.. You really had me on edge through this story, and I liked how Kagome got to be in Kikyou's spot for a while with Tamako around- I think Kikyou's way too misunderstood sometimes. One thing I really liked and noticed was that just like her dad, Kagome left her loved ones to protect them.. Only his children didn't very well hate him for it. Angst kills me- in a good way, though, keeps me reading c: And I didn't think the end was rushed at all, it was open and inviting to the imagination. I enjoyed this so very, very much!

This piece has been nominated at the Feudal Association!

Founded in 2005 by author/artist, Dark Avenger, the Feudal Association consists of writers, artists, and enthusiasts of the InuYasha fandom. But aside from that, we are also proud to say that we are an awards guild that recognizes fan-fiction and artwork. Several times a year we nominate, vote, and hand out honors to some of the best creations in the fandom.

Our official website can be found here:

feudal- pulpfiction feudal/

The current nominations pages are here:

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Check them out to see what you were nominated for!

Our Yahoo Group, where the nominations and voting occurs, can be found here: groups. yahoo group/ FeudalAssociation/

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