I noticed an improvement in your writing in this chapter compared to the first. Try to be more descriptive andattempt to develop the story at a slightly slower rate. The concept is good and the story line is interesting but it moves very quickly. You describe actions in a brief manner and switch between the past and present tense (I.e. she walked into the room vs she felt her feet carry her into the room) (yes bad example) which are easily corrected errors. Strive for improving your story telling skills first then worry more about your writing strength though. Generally with one comes improvement in the other.

On that note, interesting story. I will be watching for more.

i can't wait to see if you'll do the awesome-ness of ultimate fluff writing in my thoughts right now and that is write a proposal scene later on in the story where booth proposes to bren right there at the docks where they first meet... ;] although cliche i know but it's like like... "IT'S SO FLUFFY!"

Hmmm as I promised.

This is not a fail. You've taken my advice well. Trust me, your writing was a whole lot better in this chapter, and all I really needed to do what make a few changes here and there. Other than that, it was amazing. :D

Your beta must be awesome.

LOL! Just kidding. :)

oh my god. i just read this story (AGAIN) and i need an update! (: lol

ahhh! i can't wait for more! i hope you'll finally update like crazy! :D please? it's really good and i really like it :)

Good plot, really liked it. Please update, it is a refreshing take on their relationship.

Please keep it up, and update soon.

RAWRS! update soon please? and i really like how the story is going so far! :D :]

Much better chapter. I'm glad Bones knows about Seeley Booth in her teenage years.

More chapters please . .

I love it! Great story! Can't wait for more!

DEFINITELY! continue! :D

Of course you should continue. So far it's very good. And, I love good fluff.

continue!

Yes i think you should just be careful with the sappiness if you are going to make this reminiscent of a teen fic, good job so far

that was great loved it