Please write more

You went from third person to first person shane after the phone call. I enjoyed reading it otherwise.

i love the story, update soon

haha, this is so cute!

Aw! Sweet!

Love it, Update soon :D

Maddie x

update

Love it :D

Update soon :D

Such a good idea :P

Maddie x

loved it more more smitchie love and the baby and the gang loved it update soon!

oh :D i like this. it's really interesting.

one suggestion: make an new paragraph whenever there is a different speaker. it makes it easier to figure out who's saying what.

for example-

“Shane? Shane? Are you okay? I knew I shouldn’t have told you.”

“No, I’m happy you told me but when?”

“When what?”

“When did it happen?”

INSTEAD OF -

“Shane? Shane? Are you okay? I knew I shouldn’t have told you.”“No, I’m happy you told me but when?”

“When what?”“When did it happen?”

update soon (:

Love iit :)

It's so sweet :D

Maddie x