POOR L ENJOY WAT LIGHT WAS DOING TO HIM BECAUSE OF A DAMN DRUG

Love it 33

Very very very very very naughty...

*nosebleed*

O lala! Naughty, naughty! :D

Good story!

This!was!AWSOME!

GREAT!FIC!

For starters, I never in a million years thought you would write something like this and to be honest it's not that bad! I would go use less "plain" adjectives to describe parts such as "L was trying really hard not to make any noises that would satisfy the brunette." I would substitute that for maybe "L tried desperately to prevent any pleasuring noises leaving his mouth to satisfy the brunette." Things like that give the story a little more meat. Other than that, the details were well written. A few spelling and grammar issues as well as inconstancies with who you're addressing, but nothing a good editing round couldn't fix. Okay I'll shut up now, I'm being too nit picky lol