You're honestly sacrificing character for the sake of plot. Every single one of your characters is completely OOC. I can't even enjoy this story.

First of all, I need to address the ridiculousness of Bella just happening upon the Denali residence the way she did. Do you have any idea how large Denali is and the utterly slim chance of Bella just finding their house in the wilderness on a whim? Another thing is the watch on Bella's bank account. Since she's a legal adult, and had only been missing for one night, there's no way she'd have a watch on her account. She hasn't been missing long enough for a missing person's report to be filed and a watch put on her account, even with her father as Chief of Police. The bank would never allow it.

Another thing is how incredibly OOC Bella is. Not trusting the Denalis with the truth, stealing from them... They ask her almost no questions right from the start. The way Tanya refused to answer the door right away makes no sense either. And then, wow, how convenient that Kate randomly starts talking about how impossible it is for a vampire and a human to have a baby. This doesn't flow at all. The only thing I could do while reading that part was roll my eyes because it's beyond ridiculous in the most cliche way.

Lastly, Bella somehow drives from Washington straight into Alaska, bypassing Canada? You need to do some serious research. It's also insane to me that Bella would go straight to the Volturi without even trying to tell the Denalis the truth. All she'd need is a couple of days to prove the rapid growth of the baby in her belly and they'd easily believe her and call Carlisle. Instead of even trying, she decides to steal the random blood bags in their fridge and take off to Italy to ask for help from the scary human blood drinking vamps. Alternatively, she could have told the Denalis the truth and been rejected by them, accused of lying and turned away. At least that way she'd feel like her last resort is to seek out the Volturi and you'd have a much more believable story.

I was all for this until Bella staryed acting like a moron. There's a reason people don't like this kind of cliches.

Thought it was harsh ness had to spend so long with cullens but couldn't tell them who she was

The turn around with the voluri was clever and believable..

A few pointers... I read first two chapters twice as it didn't say they had sex... so was a bit shocked when got to the pregnancy...

At times the story felt rushed... could have had more feeling with a slower pace...

I enjoyed your story... a really original take on twilight..

sooooo he never was with anyone else just because bella was alive...even if he didn't know it..
so if she was dead he would have been with all of them? is that what he was really saying cause that's what it sounded like ...and I find it weird that he was soooo desparate for female conpaninship cause he didn't need a woman before bella...but after bella hes willing to date the vampire worlds biggest whore?

Edward was actually dating Tanya? omg that's soooo gross
and it sounds like he dated her on his own but then jasper went in to make sure they stayed together...he still dated her!
and all those other girls, sure they were pushed on him but he still made the decision to date them!
and poor bella hasn't touched another guy! she should have fucked alec before she went back...I desparately need them to be "even"

I just cant get over Edward grinding all over Tanya sperm dumpster denali and kissing her and having her...in his mouth omg I'm soooo grossed out! I'm gonna throw up

I think Tayna took her for revenage

Thank you. Loved all again. :)

You know I love this story. Thank you for keeping it up. :)

Have read this story before. Loved it then. Love it now. :)

Wow.