Hope to read more soon.

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This stoy seems a little bit rushed... otherwise its pretty good... maybe add a little more detail

Selena's protecting her mommy's virtue.

Your grammar sucks, but your story is potentially interesting.

Wow things are getting interesting! I feel an all out battle coming on! :)

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Damn Harry go back to Tom!

Nice.

Wow this story is really good please continue...and already done it :)

Both both both booooottttthhhhhhh i mean bbbbbboooootttthhhhh epppp

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B-no

this is good i like what you have done and i like the way in which you left it hanging i look forward to the next few chapters.

To tell you, I am having little problems in terms of sentence structure but other than that, I am fine and I am quite a perfectionist when it comes to proper capitalization and spelling. The story, plot-wise, is very interesting but when it comes to its structure and thought order, it goes downhill from there. I suggest you pick a beta, not exactly from this site but a friend who might me be good in grammar or an older sibling, you know, whoever is willing around in your place.

I love how the plot unfolds, it is quite interesting especially this is HP/TR aka LV and they already have a child to boot. Please continue, I would like to see how this unfolds.

awesome i love it!