This is so out of character for Naruto in this story. The fact that he absolutely refuses to forgive the village yet can have a civil conversation with the woman who indirectly made his life what it is and even go as far to say he can forgive her makes no sense. If you wanted a story where Naruto was a forgiving person then why does he hate the village so much he is unwilling to forgive them when I would argue what Kushina did is much worse (leaving a child in a hostile environment with no way to protect themselves)? I am sorry to say it but I am done reading this story, the characterization of Naruto in this chapter pretty much ruins this story for me.

This is an interesting story and I am looking forward to reading more. I am curious about whether Itachi will allow Sasuke to destroy Konahoa. It has been over a year and a half since this story has been updated so I hope it will be continued

You used the name Danzo instead of Gato several times in the strip club

I am confused. It has been mentioned more than once that Sasuke was the last Uchiha but then you changed it and in this chapter you added them to teams. Plus Danzo admitted that he had the Uchiha killed and set Itachi up but it appears nothing was done with that information

Hahahahaha nice. Can’t wait to see more. Hope you continue this soon

Uhhh I feel I should correct something here. It’s homophobia the irrational fear of blood. Not hemophelia which would be a lust or sexual attraction to blood lol. Tsunade not Anko hahaha

Love this so far bit surprised you didn’t say something along the lines of “Shadows when compared to true darkness are exactly that. A shadow.”

Seems like the uzumakis keep getting screwed over,at first i thought it was only naruto but as the story progreses it seems like minato choose village over family to me, anko basically screwed herself over when she accepted the councils offer, now karin is what i'm curious about, is she going to screw her family over a crush or stay a loyal girl to her family.

Really hope that she chooses family over the Bast*** cuz i feel that uzumaki's should stick up for one another even though i haven't read 'till chapter 30 i'm getting there don't worry but man i am loving this keep updating as soon as you have time to write, if you're too busy then take your time i guess gonna bookmark this in google so that i can revisit after a month or two after fininshing up 'till chapter 30.(still chapter 17)

I appriciate the amount of work you put into this Thank you

man im hating this novel the mc has ever reason to burn the shitty village to the ground and i dont want to here none of that revenge is petty bullshit

ok this is so stupid this yuago bitch is the same of all of konaho i dont see why the mc trust her in any way also hinata has no right to ask him to stay in that pile of shit they call konha whatever

CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE CHAPTERS

Ayeee its a good story but Its just too dark for me to read... cbf to deal with stories like that.. ngl I love tsunade as a char so you kinda put me off when you said she fucks others to get out of debts etc I mean she would either run or just beat the sht outta them..

I am glad what you did with kushina as I have seen too many dark fics where they just hate her and in this story it didnt make much sense for him to.

However I have found most of this story to be forced af It kinda makes it hard to read. I mean kakashi has no reason to hate him so much.. we have been given no reason for his hate other than he just is many others in similar cases.

Another thing is how you keep going back on what you said previously. Take kibas mom as one. You said before she hated him, glared at him etc but then later you said the reason was bc she was threatened by danzo etc but this doesnt make sense as he was already dead and she continued... other things similar to this goes on throughout and it doesnt make much sense

Eh, what the heck. I'll criticize the writing some more.
So when I first looked at the story, what caught my eye was the word count. I aim for longer stories in my fanfiction preferences. Then I notice the size of the scrollbar for each chapter as a rough estimate as to their length, and found that it seemed rather large, considering how many words there are compared to how many chapters. A conundrum easily understood thanks to the terrible way that dialogues are smashed into paragraphs.
Something I hadn't yet mentioned in my other reviews is the issue of reader's fatigue. If you throw big paragraph after big paragraph at them, eventually their gaze will start skipping over the words as the exhaustion of slogging through uncomfortably written paragraphs and they won't actually be READING the story anymore. In a properly written story, dialogue helps clue the reader in to paying attention once more by its obvious break in the visual structure of the page by being single lines or short sentences to a paragraph. Again, something that is lacking in this poorly constructed story.

What I said in my previous review? I take it back. The quality of the actual dialogue between characters is really bad as well, not just normal bad.

You know, the way you write dialogue is bad. Really bad. I'm not talking about the actual way two characters hold a conversation, which is just normal bad. I'm talking about the fact that the words and replies of multiple characters are contained in single paragraphs.
There are many good reasons dialogue is written the way it is in the English language. Having speech broken up by paragraph not only helps easily and obviously split up who is saying what words in what context, it also helps convey how long these conversations feel in reality. In addition, it's consistent. Consistency is very important for language skills, and readers pick up on inconsistencies when reading a novel. As it stands, you've got people sharing paragraphs when they talk, and then those paragraphs are broken up without rhyme or reason, which is completely arbitrary and thus feels clunky and unnatural.
You need a massive overhaul to the entire written structure of your story, mate.