This is a great story, update again please.

Please continue

Poor Toshiro!

Please update soon!

Wow! upated soon!

Ouch, that's really nasty.

Please update soon!

grrrr...i hate yamamoto..LOL. :D i'll have to wait for the next :D

Wow, this is quite a different take on Momo and Hitsugaya. Though, I suggest that you don't use parenthesis statements too much. People tend to ignore them.

Oh also, the head captain thing - I just stick to sou-taichou. Just format it in italic so people can tell that it's a foreign word.

Please update soon!

I really like your story and your writing style. It's very ... clean (don't ask me what that means, I don't really know). However, I think you might want to spend a little more time on characterization, at least for this chapter - it seemed a bit rushed. Also, they call Yamamoto, soutaichou but what that translates to in English, I'm not quite sure.

Aside from an awkwardly-phrased sentence every now and then, this is coming along fairly well. Also, don't forget that Hitsugaya took over running Fifth Division after Aizen faked his death and Momo was jailed (and later in a coma), and after that starting helping Kira with the Third Division's paperwork when Ichimaru defected. Please write more soon!

Really great! Keep updating please! :))

wow, sad.

poor little shiro-chan

I have to admit that this is a very interesting idea. It's quite well written too, for your first fanfiction ever.

I hope you're planning to continue this, and if you do, what will be your end pairing? O:

This is a really interesting take on the Hitsugaya/Matsumoto/Hinamori situation. It had never occurred to me that Hitsugaya might not tell Matsumoto what had happened - it made for a nice twist! I'm hoping you're planning to continue this! :)