Quite possibly the greatest thing ever. I would sell my soul and several body parts for more. ouo;

This is pretty great. Loving the humanization of the characters...please continue!

I am loving this! What a unique pairing! And it is very well written, as well. I hope you update soon! :)

The beginning had me worried for the safety of the Flygon pair as well as the safety of the main protagonists. Though, I admit that I was confused as to why Kousei was attacked in the first place till I read further. I'm glad that the Flygon pair had a reason for their actions, and I'm glad that the conflict was resolved, plus, Maji is as awesome as ever, I love that little Swellow.

I also like the way the relationship between Palkia and Kouseikei has been developing over the course of the story, and I absolutely love how you included the legend of the Star Maiden into the Shenuverse, and how you used it to lead into the further development of the relationship.

There was one instance of word usage that had me arching a brow, though. The use of 'contraption' when describing the whirlwind generated by the Flygon felt a little off to me, but aside from that, grammar and word usage was perfect as usual.

I do have one question, one that's been on my mind for a long time now. Since you mentioned the figures in the Desert of Lines as being alternate forms of the Legends, does this mean that the gods and goddesses of the Shenu pantheon have their Pokémon forms? I've always wondered about that, and have been meaning to ask about it for a while, since it will greatly effect a recent idea that emerged for one of my own Shenuverse works.

That aside, I really enjoyed this, and I felt that this was a chapter worth waiting for. I can't wait to see what happens next, especially now that Palkia and Kouseikei are nearing the end of their journey.

Please write the rest of the story.

Normally, I don't do stories that are series tones but I really liked this one and it kinda gave me ideas on what Palkia's powers can really do.

(oh and looking fowrd to restricted scenes)

Yay, it is really nice to see Dialga and his sisters again! Mesprit never fails to amuse me, I just adore her~. And now I'm wondering what on earth Dialga will do when he realizes what Palkia's been doing. XD Hoo dear.

I promised myself I wouldn't blab on and on once again about how friggin adorable they are together, but this chapter threatened to make me forget that promise. XD AAH! This chapter is just precious! It's really neat seeing Palkia teaching him how to swim. So encouraging and gentle, like a mother. And he is so embarrassed at himself, so desperate for help, it just makes my heart pound. I find it really awesome that their attraction to each other makes sense, and it doesn't seem out of place or forced like a lot of fanfics these days. I really like how you portray their relationship, and I can't stress that enough.

I like that we're starting to get more information on Ashikase's character, and his motives for pursuing Kousei and Kiya. (even their names are adorable together, hee~) He's jealous at Kousei's abilities and suspicious as to what the heck he's up to - and - do I see some desire for Palkia in there~?

I can't friggin' wait for the next chapter; you write so phenomenally well!

I really /loved/ this chapter, my friend. You really are very talented when it comes to showing us the progressive evolution of their relationship. I also loved the little part with possessive Dialga and his three sisters XD But the best part was of course in the cave and underwater _ Kousei's attitude is sometimes just priceless XD

Oh how I've waited for another chapter!

First I must ask, the two deities that caused the first war, they wouldn't happen to be Reshiram and Zekrom would they? I had just finished playing White so I saw a connection :)

As you've guessed, I was beginning to wonder where Asikashe was, and I'm glad to see you've brought him back, if only for a moment.

And I absolutely love that you made Dialga as protective of his sister as he is. I find it funny of him to be so protective of her even though she is capable of taking care of herself.

I also see that Kousei is becoming much bolder with his words, though he may not mean to, and Palkia is reacting quite shyly. It's funny to me how he thinks that saying what he did was a bad thing :)

And since I am absolutely horrible at writing good reviews the only thing I have left to say is that I absolutely loved this chapter, as I do all your work, and I can't wait for the next one :)

Your loyal reader,

AeroSpark

Great story! Update soon!:)

;_; This really made me choke up inside, and other people's writing almost /never/ does that to me. Omigosh, that little gesture of kindness... when Kiya touched his cheek... ahhhh, it was - so - tender! ;_; And everything else in the chapter was, just, I mean, wow. I agree completely with what Chaos said - you have such a gift for making these scenes believable, and you definitely give a lasting effect on the reader. I could imagine all the interactions in my head; I could hear their voices and feel what they felt. You are really incredible, Nefertili. And I'm /very/ critical when it comes to writing, believe me, but you've blown me away.~

I...am at a loss for words. My throat closed up and tears touched my eyes when they had that argument. One actually fell from my eye as they talked in the grove.

Also I like how I got to see Kousei angry. Though it pains me that he verbally lashed out at Kiya, I think Kousei angry will give me even more reason never to piss off a Salamence. Which gives me an idea...

But anyway, beautiful job as always. I suck at writing meaningful reviews so I hoped you kind of understood how I felt about this chapter. If not...well there's always next chapter.

Speaking of future chapters, I hope I get to see the other dragons interact with Kousei. That would be interesting I think.

Until next time My Lady

My eyes widened when I saw that you had this up. you were right about the argument being painful for them, but I'm so glad that they made up in the end. The ending scene was very beautiful and made me smile and I think it deserves an illustration.

I admit that I squeed when you mentioned Volcaronas even though you only used them within a certain figure of speech. Goes to show how much I love that fire moth.

I also find Maji very endearing and I love her character, but then again, I have a soft spot for bird 'mon. As for the chapters I failed to review before due to everything that was happening, I'll include my thoughts here so I won't spam your inbox. I really liked the mini-arc with them helping the family with their Mareep, and the way Kousei handled himself against the pack was done very well, especially since he was fighting to save that one little lamb. Very, very wonderfully done.

As always, your writing is absolutely captivating and very beautiful, I could easily picture the scenes in my mind, hear the voices of the characters, so much... It's an honor to be friends with you, Antarel, and I am looking forward to finally being able to get our collab rolling again.

My muse (she's been a right active little bugger lately, sheesh!) has been bothering me to start my own prequel, but I'm not sure yet since one of the characters is yours and I'm not wanting to butcher him, but I am working on a small snippet which may or may not end up being used since I do these things to get a feel for new characters, and I'll be emailing that to you when I'm done.

Late review is late, so sorry!

Once again, your gorgeous way with words just blows me away! I love it! Your writing voice is so poetic and colorful. _

It was neat to see some of Kouseikei's fighting style, and the battle scene with the wolves was so epic. *O* And I just love how you portrayed the Mareep. So adorable!

Omigosh, and, Kouseeiii! ;_; Poor guy! That was such a tender moment, when Palkia and the Swellow were comforting him. He's so humble and brave and kind and she's so sweet and forgiving, they're just PERFECT for each other. *sighs~*

Hoo boy. Ashikase, quit ruining the moment! You did an epic job with the last paragraph of the chapter. It was a real DUN DUN DUNNNN moment. hehe.

This keeps getting better and better! Nefertili, you are AWESOME! Keep on keeping on~! :D

Excellent chapter, as usual, Antarel. Now I trust this Swellow _ Mija is a fine name, too. I especially like Eikyuu, he seems so cute! (I know, I'm weird _;) The fight scene was pretty good, as well! And Kiya is really full of compassion with Kousei. (kiss-him-kiss-him! XD)