Interesting

This fic is obviously rushed, chaotic and so random sometimes, it makes my lips twitch. I'm not proud of silly, silly Naruto. Most of weird things happened because of him. It was so frustrating watching him being such a coward to come out rude towards Sasuke. Like running away thrice, when he was actually speaking to him or signalled his intent to have a decent conversation by opening his mouth.
Then all of sudden Naruto offers Sasuke blowjob? I would be soo offended. Maybe the reasons Naruto gave him for that were not entirely true (like, because of dare anf curiosity), but even if Uzumaki was in love and genuinly wanted to give him a head, man - you don't do it to someone you never had normal conversation with, someone you insult everyday, someone you were an asshole to all the time (even though the other part was really trying to make connection and gathered up his courage to approach the blonde). And if Naruto was really taking those dares so seriously, then someone should have a serious talk with him. And Kiba too, btw. You don't play with people's feelings in such a douchy way.

Initiating sexual intercourse in a public place, next to your sleeping dad? That's messed up on so many levels. Minato waking up at the end felt so out of blue. Like remembering you left some loose ends five minutes before credits.

There was a big family argument you didn't elaborate enough on. Ofc we know Itachi anf Fugaku didn't have much time for young Sasuke, but that didn't explain his father to be such a dick. What happened to the whole family? Did Sasuke cut contact with his dad? Does he stay in touch with Itachi?
So many things you could have write more about instead of that lemon.

Awww! A sequel please! I also want to know what Sasuke will ask that night! This was such a beautiful story! Keep writing, Ganbatte!k

I really liked this story it was really nice to read even if it was alittle short the plot and the way it was wrote out was really good too AND THE LEMON WAS SO HOT!
Thanks for the story-Fireworks

Yay Sasu and naru love eatch other yay now some SasuNaru loving!.

I feel so sorry for sasuke I hope things get bitter him (meaning naru will hurry and man to him with his love confession) thro question is'nt. Naruto's dad second name namikaze not Uzumaki cause that's narus mums second name?.
Can't wait to read the next chap xxx

This story looks really good so far I can't wait to keep reading and I am gonna take a guess and say the doctor is narus dad and that's why sasu thought naru was the doc when he woke up...I hope sasu don't think he loved naru cause he looks like the doc...OMG is there be lemon in the next chap :o hoots read on too find out !

Awww what a wonderful ended. I loved this!

well this was crazy rushed lol it was going fine but then i felt like you forgot 10 chapters in the middle somewhere..? how does it go from we hate eachother to blow job to i don't even know why you of all people would be visiting my father to practically hospital sex to hey wow dad's awake from his coma! happily ever after, the end..in 2 chapters? lol they should've met at the hospital like both visiting his father & then sasuke would have to explain why.. they would become friends/lovers etc it has a lot of potential.. what's there is written decently.. it could be really good..if you fixed it

awww

Omigosh! U brought out my true fangirlyness with the last paragraph! Omg they gonna get married! *screams and faints* hehe i luved it! Erite a sequel please! D

Yay! happy ending! I keep reading stories with sad endings and it's getting old. So this was nice! Sasuke proposing YAY!

Awwwww! That was sweet! But too many flashbacks! DX Lol, I still loved it, though! _

This was soo cute! Thanks for the great read, keep up the good work!

Great story. It was short and sweet. I love flashbacks, and you did a good job of capturing both sides of the story. Keep up the awesome work.