this was well done I have done little mermaid story of my own that you are welcome to read if you wish

So cute! I loved it! :D

good job. please add more!:)

lol CLIFF HANGER! CRUSES! This is a wonderful description of this scene! Great Job! :D

Wonderful.

I loved this! Oh please continue! I want to know what happens next! PLEASE!

Present tense works! I hope you carry out your plans to add more! :D

Excellent! I've always wanted to write something like this, but I never got around to it. You did an amazing job, though. SO romantic! I was holding my breath along with Ariel. It is difficult to write in this tense, (I have a story of my own written in this manner) but you pulled it off nicely.

xJadeRainx

Keep us the good work!

Beautiful! Such a nice chapter! I LOVE disneys... especially this one :D

In answer to your private message:

My name does come slightly from Pride and Predjudice; which film do you prefer? The BBC Or Keira Knightley version?

Oh, and 'Lullaby' is just completely made up! I wanted it to be musical... cause it's part of wahat I am.

Lizzy xx