lol you should of told us when they did xD
but haha it was cute

your author's note didn't make any since

but the story was good

i usually like longer stories but this was super cute! deserves more reviews!

This was really sweet and romantic but... THIS WAS FREAKING HILARIOUS TOO!SPEED OF A HORNY TEENAGE MALE HAHAHAHA! NEVER HEARD OF THAT BEFORE SO I CRACKED UP! ROFL

wholy shit is all i can say

that was the greatest christmas present anyone could ever give to a friend lmao

IF your friend didn't like that i would have to right a whole book of why she should lmao.

That was the most beatiful thing i have ever read lmao

its going on my favorits haha

That was really good Haley! If I may, though, I have a few critques that bothered me while I was reading.

First of all, the paragraphs are very block-ish and hard to read. And as well, (if you remember from LA class) When you make dialouge, you are supposed to make a new paragraph starting with the dialougue, so that'd help break them up.

Also, the lack of commas made the flow of some sentences weird.

But other than that, it was really good. I especcially liked the plot. I didn't see the dream-thing coming. :D

hot and nice, well done)

man, when I found out it was a dream...damn.

I liked this a lot. Especially the fact that you wrote them differently in the dream than you did in real life. Makes it easier to tell the different parts apart, and see that the second part is more realistic.

The only small problem would be the sometimes switching of first person to third person, and then back again (Also, I would have loved to see the full on non-dream sex scene!)

REALLY SUPER AMAZINGLY GOOD. ] PLEASE WRITE MORE PWEASE PWEASE PWEASE