in chapter 57 you have Hermiones parents in British Columbia where her father gets reactivated, and ordered to Charenwell, with tickets to Toronto then London, here you have them in the California

potential edit. after you say "Seven Families" You list a couple of names that are not included. I'm pretty sure you meant to say Charlie instead of George

And you cut it off with a teaser. Hope you eventually get back to it.

I don't like Harry Potter as a series. I have read the first book and a good Portion of the second ,but i never felt interested in the charachters or the i stopped Reading .This Is the First Harry Potter related content I have consumed in years and what knowledge i had of the setting,Houses and charachters was lacking at best and a Distant half-true memory at worst .Most of the names in this fanfiction I had never heard since english is a foreign language to me so what i knew of Harry Potter was in another yet,despite basing your creation in an entire series of books of preknowledge and lore i was compelled. I wanted to know what was going to Happen next .You kept me awake for hours despite me not knowing anything about the Magic stuff in a Story where a Main Point Is the Magic stuff .I know this review might not Help you to improve,but in my opinion you did a better Job in making me Care for those characters than JKR did .It May have some typos or even just Pläne plotholes but that doesn't Take away from the fact that this is one of the best Stories i have read

Nymphadora was confirmed to be having a daughter she was naming Andrea, how is she suddenly having a son?

First, Sirius Black was born on November 3rd, 1959. You also seem to not understand what a 'direct line' is. A direct line means that it would go straight to the phone on Lupin's desk as Lord Mayor, not his secretary's phone. This would mean that Remus spoke with Sirius Black and, somehow, didn't recognize his old friend's voice at all, and nobody believes for even a second that Sirius could stop himself from giving a million tells as to his true identity. Also, while the Muggles discounted King Arthur, the magicals did not, so Sirius not knowing about the Order of the Round Table is highly suspect, especially given the fact that Merlin was Arthur's chief advisor.

Moving on.

If your goblet statements are to be believed, then that means the Moody lied through his teeth when he said the fake goblet had Horcrux taint on it and lied again when he said that the magical signature matched the taint found on Harry. Was Moody informed, or are you saying the goblins purposely copied the Horcrux signature over to the fake cup?

You stated earlier that House Dumbledore lost what little money they had ages ago. And yet again, in this chapter, you state that Dumbledore lost his house's money submitting a false will for Charlus Potter.

Your pitiful attempt to fix your mistakes continually explode spectacularly in your face when confronted with logic and your previous chapters. This is why you should take notes! The mounting contradictions the further one goes into this story make it harder and harder to follow. Your world building started going south because you didn't remember what you had done previously and constantly went back on it all. You either keep notes, or read your previous chapters to 'get back into the mood' and not make so many mistakes.

Mistakes.

First, Harry already had the Horcrux cup, the fake Goblet. The real one would lack the taint of a Horcrux, unless Tom made one Horcrux and completely forgot he made it, which is highly unlikely because it was found in a 'Black Property' and not a vault. Tom fancies himself a genius and wouldn't leave any of his Horcruxes exposed like that. The only 'exposed' one was the diary, but it could be argued that either Lucius figured the diary would never be discovered or the young Tom fragment was that full of itself and ordered Lucius to sneak it into Hogwarts to unleash the basilisk.

Two, you already pointed out that Tom was not, in fact, part of Slytherin's line at all many chapters ago. Tonks said the Slytherin line disappeared, as in died out or faded into squibs or there were no sons born to carry the name, yet Harry pointed out that Tom was the legal heir of Slytherin chapters later, and legal heirs are oldest son to oldest son. (while Harry was the magical heir, which is oldest child to oldest child, even if it is a daughter) If that was the case, the Gaunts would have been the Slytherins, since there is no reason for a son marrying a woman to take her name, especially if he's of a higher class.

It would make more sense if the British Magicals created wards that attacked electronics' core components, especially given how massively inferior and less resilient vacuum tubes were compared to transistors. For instance, vacuum tubes were liable to partially disconnecting if jiggled the wrong way and required specialized components to keep them functional, even when the machine was turned off.

The 'anti-electronic ward' theory makes far more sense than your own theory. If it were a case of magic destroying electronics, then each and every single last vacuum tube was an IED waiting for a strong enough pulse of magic. That, and both Diagon Alley and the Ministry of Magic would have absolutely massive dead zones around them. No need to ward those places to kill Muggle machines, since they either can't bring them in or won't. Muggle-born would bring entertainment to school, only for it to fail, and by the time their magical friends invite them over, the concept of 'magic kills electronics' is cemented in their minds, in spite of the kids not having any issues when in their own Muggle homes.

Besides, if magic really did attack Muggle devices, it would make it painfully easy to hunt magicals down. Just walk around with something electronic, and if it suddenly dies, you're near a magical home. A few more tests and you can bomb the 'target' location, killing a bunch of magicals in no time. Fidelius wards only hide it and confuse those who don't know when inside of the Secret, and a Muggle repelling ward just makes it even more obvious where to drop your ordinance if you have lines of people suddenly moving away from a specific patch of forest as their walkman die in spite of the new batteries.

What Mr. Delacour said here goes back on your own canon. Again.

The Statute of Secrecy was said to REQUIRE the Ministries of each country to be in contact with their Muggle opposites. Magical Britain itself also dealt with the PM, with said man complaining about that pompous prick Fudge seeming to believe he was a king that all should be waiting to meet. You stated this chapters ago and, as is a reoccurring theme with you, you've gone against it in this chapter.

Notes. Make some bloody notes. The contradictions make you look like a D-list fanfic writer.

Hogwarts, founded 1000 AD

St. George's, founded 1200 AD (approx)

Before we continue, remember that a magical generation is generally 100 years, since 'it is rare for a witch/wizard to die naturally before 100.'

St. Andrews, founded "a few generations" before St. George's, but still not as old as Hogwarts.

St. Andrews makes no sense, since "a few generations" would make it older than Hogwarts, since a few means 'three or more,' which is impossible because Hogwarts is the oldest school. I think you meant to say that St. Andrews was founded in 1200 AD and St. George's was founded "a few generations later."

Make notes so you do not make mistakes like this if you ever come back. You are a great writer, but your world building is like being inside a dyslexic person's head. You either make nonsense statements like the above one or, when representing information later, make it so that your characters either seem senile or you straight up invalidate your own canon.

"Ginny Potter is youngest sister of the three Weasley gentlemen you saw earlier" should be "Ginny Potter is the sister of the three Weasley gentlemen you saw earlier." Saying she's the 'youngest sister' implies she has an older sister, and as much of a little sissy bitch Ron is, he's still male. Your following sentence clarified that she was clearly younger than the male Weasleys who the concubines met before, so calling her the youngest was completely unnecessary.

Miverva told Dumbledore, to his face, that she was in league with the Potter family when she retired.

Make notes, just do it!

Going back on your canon. Again.

You stated a few chapters earlier that the Concubine Bond was made first, then the Consort Bond was created so some witches could avoid being turned into Concubines. They had concrete evidence that the bonds were both made and that the Concubine Bond was the later creation.

In this chapter, you state that the Consort Bond may have always existed and the Concubine Bond was made later.

So, which is it?

Make notes so you avoid contradicting yourself every few chapters in the future.

She was born Ukrainian and spoke that language or dialect her entire life.

It's very very strange. You wrote that she was born in Leningrad (St. Petersburg). So, this is the same strange as if you wrote that she was born in London and spoke wells or scottish.
Ivanova is a straight russian family. If she was ukrainian, and moreover spoke ukrainian she must have family name something like Ivanenko, Ivanjuk, Ivanchuck...
And about ukrainian language, with so difference with rusian to have "some troubles" with that or to feel the difference in it, so then she must be born or at least live in Kiev or some westerner

(sorry for my bad english)

Tatiana Maria Ivanova - It is really incorrect russian name. (do we remember that she is from Leningrad?)
In russian names the first name is real name
The second name is not name actually, it strongly based on father name (and more over in russian it called 'отчество', which actually means something like 'fathering' may be). And, for example, if father name of this Tatiana is Boris, then her full name will be Tatiana Borisovna Ivanova. (Borisovich for males).