| Reviews for My Protector |
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   madhattervirgo23 chapter 2 . 1/14/2017 This is good |
| LouiseUchiha chapter 2 . 10/12/2014 How you dare to do this? T_T |
| LouiseUchiha chapter 1 . 10/12/2014 This is gold! |
| CreepierPastas chapter 2 . 8/23/2013 PLEASE UPDATE! |
| XxFlickerxX chapter 1 . 5/26/2013 A little fast paced but, I think I've found my new OTP! Update soon? |
| Headphones chapter 2 . 3/19/2013 Please update this interaction between juugo and sasuke is so cute.. |
| Shinome Akira chapter 2 . 1/16/2013 More please! |
| God of the Tsukuyomi chapter 2 . 10/19/2012 Continue this,I love this though I'd still take JuugoxNaruto anyday and anytime more. |
| XRatedSexyX chapter 2 . 5/10/2012 i was so into the story then you just cut me off, you cant do that to me! |
| xxYukiKagamixx chapter 1 . 3/5/2012 I've read almost all of your stories but some of them are not finished cause you were finishing 'the crying killer' which i read by the way AWSOMENESS comes off your stories and makes me squeel in a total fan girl way PLEEEEEEAAASE finish your other naruto stories this one and the madasasu ones cause I LOVE THEM SOOOO MUCH :3 |
| Bakaberry chapter 1 . 1/12/2012 Awh cute! |
| xallfalldownx chapter 1 . 9/25/2011 First off, this seems like it may be an interesting read, and I'm glad to see that, for the most part, it's well written. There are a a few areas in which it needs work though. Writing in first person can be (very) difficult and only a few people can pull it off well. Unfortunately you're not one of them, but you could be with a bit of work. With first person the reader has a first-hand view of the characters thoughts so, as the writer, you need to understand that character's thought process and if you're writing in more than one POV, as you did here, you need to make sure that the characters thought processes aren't too similar. Another major thing I noticed is that the way your characters think is very childish, for lack of a better word. They seem to accept things too easily when they should in fact be wary or suspicious of them. One other thing I've noticed is that you seem to be lazy with your punctuation (no commas where there are supposed to be commas for example) and that can easily ruin the flow of the story. But as I said, this IS written pretty well, the grammar is pretty good and it seems like it could be quite a fun read. My favourite part, I think, is where Juugo tells Sasuke that he's his, it sounds almost as if Juugo is a bit of an obsessive maniac (which isn't necessarily a bad thing.) |
| Kei26 chapter 1 . 2/23/2011 eep this was soo cutee you musst continuee pleease |
| Sasukefreek13 chapter 2 . 10/13/2010 Please continue! |
| patsi chapter 2 . 2/18/2010 i hope you continue this very soon. |
