Omg i read this twice. once in silence and i had tears in my eyes but none of them fell than i read it again with '2 is better than 1' playing and i started crying like a baby. and i know it was just a one shot but please can you make a story that like is the first part? I WILL LOVE YOU FOREVER IF YOU DO!

oh man , I told myself I wouldn't cry just to prove you wrong, but failed ! loved it though ;3;

aww this is so sad but very well written

good job

I know what you were trying to say with this, but it just seems.. wrong. like something's missing. there's emotions that should be put into play here, that aren't. i'm not really feeling the whole 'oh god, my best friend/kid i was in love with is gone, how'm i supposed to cope' kinda thing you're supposed to when stuff like this happens. you also keep swapping tenses.

Or something. Urgh, I don't know : I like the idea though, maybe try to extend on it a little?