I REALLY like this! PLEASE turn it into a full story!

I like it...

a full lenght story sounds great! can you please make it a full length story?

Please continue the story it's really good!

Please continue with the story. I'm very curious to see whats gonna open next!

i think you should tourn it in to a story, but thats my

it's your story after all

Yes, you should.

Continue it, I mean.

It's a good story, where the female counterpart isn't... you know? An excellent trainer.

Besides, I love anything Raichu and anything good looking, and hey! Volkner has BOTH.

Yoru

Oh Wow. This is an amazing story so far :) There are a lot of interpretations of Volkner out there, but I really like yours so far; just a bored guy!

I really hope you continue with this, the story seems very interesting so far! Also, I like your style of writing It's not too difficult to read, but not too straightforward either. Even though it's only friendship right now (maybe not even that) are you planning to have this turn into romance?

OMG. I really really hope you update soon! I'll be checking often

please please make another chapter! X3 it's so hard to find volkner stories out there that i actually like!

"She wanted to be a Pokémon Breeder, the problem was her mother managed to force her on a different journey, one where she would be able to see the entire world and meet all sorts of Pokémon as well as other trainers. It didn't make sense"

Indeed. So much so you couldn't even give a token explanation for how this "forcing" was actually done.

"Becoming a breeder would allow her to raise all types of Pokémon, she never needed to collect badges or go through hell in every type of weather created."

Pokemon she'd pull from thin air? It really isn't that hard to believe that breeders would also need to travel, especially for those rarer types. Breeding also involves a lot of raising, which trainers do.

You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.

"Her victory in Snowpoint took her back down the perilous snowstorm once more"

What?

Also, she's a breeder who doesn't like traveling or bad weather, but she doesn't have a pokemon that can use fly?

"She was terrified; bravery wasn't the best trait she could flaunt."

Again, what?

"She cried. She told her mother all thoughts of becoming a breeder had been blown out of her mind, so she wouldn't have to go through with fighting Volkner."

Yet again. How, exactly, is it so terrifying? She doesn't want to be a trainer, so it's not like she'd be worried about a loss on ego grounds. And it's not like she's the one doing the actual fighting.

"The violet cat didn't speak and Sybil was sure to double check the fact that her social awkwardness stopped her from making any friends throughout the journey"

You know, I'm just going to stop pointing these out. Every other sentence has some bizarre wording error. Spend less time on long, fancy sentences and more time on them actually making sense.

"she queried incredulously."

Jesus Christ. I'm not even going to keep reading.

All I'm going to say is...make it longer, please...Lol. Nah, its up to you, but I didn't expect it to end so soon D:

I liked this one-shot! Its different and I actually wanted to carry on reading. I'd of liked to see the battle though, I want to know what Pokemon Sybil has other than her Gengar, Ponyta and Glameow. I think you should definitely either make this a proper story or do a sequel where you write out the battle that takes place after Volkner has trained Sybil and her Pokemon. I'd like to read more :D