this story irritated me because THERE ARE SO MANY CAPS! do you have a relationship with the caps butten OR DID YOU FORGET WHERE IT IS SO YOU DIDN'T TURN IT OFF?

I look forward to the next chapter _

$WHY IS EVERYTHING IN CAPS, ASTERISKS, AND POOR GRAMMAR?$

Seriously, did you realize how annoying that is? Learn to write and type then come back to finish this.

what a tease, I can't believe you would do this to me! I was totally ready for yaoi goodness! I can't wait to see the new and beta'd story!

Damn it, I got to chapter 5 expected to go straight into the yummy lemon then I noticed, hey... I'm all caught up DAMN! NOT FAIR! I mean Please oh Please oh Please post it quickly! I'll give you a present!

off to the next chapter to see the blonde get ravished! YAY!

I loved this mini lemon. itachxdiedara is awesome!

No Don't shoot me! This is getting better and better! I love it! Thanks for commenting on the first chapter of my story by the way!

I love this plot it's really interesting and shows a lot of potential for something amazing! You should have it beta'd, just my personal opinion, but I love it all the same!

I really hate to say it, and I'm sure I'm not the only one who has said it, but your writing isn't the brightest crayon in the box. You need a beta reader to edit your stories and make sure it doesn't look...crappy or unprofessional.

It needs more structure and a lot of spell checking. And all the capital letters are a bit too much.

If you have no beta reader, I could beta it for you. Just tell me if you do or not.

~Mika

*looks at bullet holes around her* Missed me! KAKASHI!

Kakashi: Oh shit! *hides gun and shakes in fear*

Did you try to kill me? Do i need to burn your Icha Icha books? Ir do I have to let some evil seme rape poor little Iruka?

kakahsi: I'M SORRY! SHE MADE ME!

Hn... Any way loved the story line, but your writing is a bit less than good, I'm terribly sorry to say this, but if I hae to read something three times just to understand the general idea, I'm afraid that means you need to work a bit on your writing style. Again I am sorry if you take offense to this. If you do delete it but please take this to heart to practice your style, that way you are less likely to get a flame or a grammer nazi on your case. Trust me I had one for spelling 'MINE' like 'MIEN' beacuasse I was rushing to up-date when the library computer was about to log me out. Thank you for your time and please keep writing...

Alrye.

lol a bit of sexy yaoi at the end, yum X3

Kakashi is bad! And Sasuke is perv! I want some real smex!