l'erreur est de choisir des personnages qui sont inconnus des lecteurs. Probablement une projection de toi-même et qques amis, mais peut importe. l'univers de HP est assez riche pour prendre des héros existants auxquels on peut s'identifier.

This is a fantastic story! I can't wait to see what happens next! Just one bit of constructive criticism though, "Madeline's" birthday is in September, so she would have been 18, not 17.

It is a shame that you are not writing this or has someone else taken it up and finished it? Just finished the 19 chapters and would like to read more. You are good. Had me captured.
Stan

I sincerely hope that you will manage to find the time to add to this story. Excellent!

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first let me say, I love this story and I am sad to see that it seems you have abandon it after all. I hope you might at least consider handing it over to someone else to finish, it is that good.

Secondly, about your profile. I'm including this in review simply because I'm too tired right now to make an account for the sole purpose of sending a pm.

As a former follower of that path myself, I want you to know that I understand and wish you the best of luck. I just hope that you do not descent into the hate and intolerance that I have seen plague so many others. I say former because I came to the realization that if there is 'truth' to be found, it is currently too great and beyond the human mind's ability to grasp. As such, I believe that such a journey is far too individual and person to be dictated by something as structured, fallible, and political, as 'religion.' How can any one path possibly try to claim to understand something so far beyond us? I don't think any particular path is wrong, simply incomplete. I hope you manage to find the balance of walking your path, and the open mindedness to to consider ideas that may make your path fuller.

Either way, this story you wrote proves that you have a gift, you might even say you have been blessed with this gift of writing. If this story is truly dead, please let someone else finish it, and keep writing what does fill you with joy to create.

Can't wait for more

Interesting story. Too bad it looks like it has been abandon...

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Finding this story really fascinating. Noticed you mention only a couple more chapters. Hope to see them soon some time in the future! Thanks for sharing this story.

Awesome chapter!

Cant wait for more!

this story's gr8 i hope you write more soon xD

Great ending to this chapter, and great story as a whole. I love the concept, and I love the implementation. Don't stop writing!

Can't wait for the rest of the story!