The fact that Ron’s boss was a dark wowed now that was a huge surprise

I did think it was her but l really did not give her that much thought like the story anyways

Weren’t they already in her flat at that time great story btw

Yeah the exclamation points

You are and incredible author pls keep writing more and more

Excellent!
I enjoyed reading this.
Thank you for writing.

Even for a story written in 2002, the characters honestly feel out of character, but it feels like a lot of the "magic" is gone, and is only a slice-of-life drama with none of the magical elements of the Harry Potter world. In fact, it felt more like a scene which would occur in the Muggle world rather thant he magical one.

You 100% suck at battle/action scene writing.

Great.

It has a good premise, however their are a few things that keep it from being a truly excellent read. The first is that it is a little OOC, Harry is portrayed as being rather weak in a fight that looks like something that would have happened in school with Malfoy. The other thing is the exclamation marks at the end of every sentence during the fight sequence, that is a no no. Other than that I have enjoyed reading this fic.

Well, let's see... 1)Natalie constantly going to the bathroom; after reading stuff like mysteries for a while, you start to take notice of the really small details 2)Polyjuice Potion; Yea, that kinda just proves number 1...

Now, The head auror dude, McNeil, seems kinda suspicious to me...could just be that I'm paranoid, who knows...

Anyways, great fic, keep going...

Great ending!

This story should definitely have more reviews!

Great story!

Brillant Story! Hope you make a sequel.