I majorly struggled with the first two paragraphs of the story when the writer described the looks on Matt and Tai's face, but I think I now understand why certain readers become frustrated when the writer tells the reader what the character is feeling rather than showing with facial ticks. This isn't to say this method doesn't have it's place, but it feels as if the writer overdid the telling with the vocabulary choice, almost as if they wanted to emphasize the looks, but then doesn't follow through with such descriptions in the rest of the story.

As for the story - it's simple, probably written by a younger writer. There's a lot of dialogue, and not a lot of description. The story is a nice, quick read, but not really memorable - the writer is still coming into their own style, so it is a bit of a bummer this was their last story posted to the site.

I love this, yes make part two! BTW, I'm writing my own story and I've seen every episode seasons 1-3 and season 1 of Xros wars, so, I'm a huge fan

After all these years, this is still one of my fave Digimon fanfics! :)

Even so many years later after being posted, this story is still wonderful. for those wondering where to read the other parts it's archived at . , which was part of the fanfic author's web site. Great fanfic!

Really hope you update soon. it's been really interesting so far. one piece of advice, try to make your chapters a bit shorter large chapters puts some people off.

good story though

Oh...this is good. Update soon okay!

- xImperfectlyX

this looks brillient

Interesting so far, and pretty good! Keep writing!

Hey, this rocks. (How come you manage to get more reviews for one chapter than I get for twelve?) One question, may or may not be answerable: Is it is or is it ain't Taito? and another, what's it doing on the front page?

No one is really waisting their time on stories like these! Too bad you didn't really continue...

This is very intersting. I like the relentionship between Tai and Matt. You should keep going and keep the same light tone.

great

great

I read this before, didn't review, I read this again, couldn't review. So here I am! It's a really great story. Too bad it was never completed. It semms like an episode of the animé. You did a good job with the characters, even after only seeing a few episodes!

Lesse... Very good story, and YES, I want you to continue, but... If you're the Ash I think you are, could you write some more rants? If I've got the wrong one, sorry. Still, MORE OF STORY!