Well I have twelve things i don't like about this story.

I don't like fact that they don't seem to care about Naruto's point of view.
I don't like how Itachi was breaking into Naruto's place.
I don't like the fact that he kept bring up family, its obviously a sore subject and to keep poking a it in such a way is insensitive.
I don't like the secretive nature of everything, that everyone knew.
How manipulative everyone is? Because everything was obviously planned.
How no one kept in contact even though they couldn't take him in.
How itachi kissed Naruto when he was obviously confused and conflicted.
How everyone assumed they could act like nothing happened, For things did happen.
I don't like the presents because they are geared towards manipulating Naruto into thinking about a past he doesn't want to remember.
How Naruto didn't seem to have a very big voice In this story ( when did he say what he was thinking? When did he have the time what with all the emotions?).
The way we knew it was Itachi... It is such a short story that revealing who was behind everything to us before revealing it to the character was pointless and took away the excitement.
And how itachi was the landlord! He knew where Naruto lived obviously, and when he was working. he could have talked to Naruto about everything at any time and well, yes it would be a different story. But if they were going out already then the whole, the let's break into his apartment and leave questionable food and presents would have been more romantic in my opinion. Because well it was just the boyfriend who did it.

So yeah, I have twelve things I don't like about this story. But i have not listed these things to be mean. Even though i pretty much said i don't like the whole story lol
Still I guess it was a sweet story, very much a Christmas story.

Hope you have a lovely Christmas and a happy new year.

Cute :)

Love it!

And then?!

You have got me dying to know about these "better times!" Great so far. :)

Aww such a sweet chapter!

This chapter was so sweet and funny

I really liked the story. However, i feel as each chapter could have been longer or had more detail to it. other than that it was REALLY good. to the point i stayed up till 3 EST reading still.

Great story itachi is soo sweet!

Okay, I know this is really late, haha, but I just wanted to say-

I think that your story could use a deal lot more of breakers/separators, as when you abruptly switch scenes. It takes me a moment to distinguish these skips, and it makes the reading experience less enjoyable.

(Ex: "Great," Naruto grinned. "Then assuming Suigetsu doesn't and hands it in early tomorrow, me and my team and get everything in by the following day, we'll be done by the end of the week. Then we can arrange that meeting for this Friday."

_(I think there should be a break here?)

He had forgotten how annoying meetings were. There was a new client who just had to meet with the guy in charge of his commercial. It was always the new ones that were so annoying and wanting to dictate everything. He couldn't wait until the guy either decided to stick with them or leave as returning clients left everything in the capable hands of the department. Thankfully though today he got to leave before the rush hour and had managed to snag a seat on the rail instead of standing for the next thirty minutes. It allowed him to get off a stop before his and pick up some groceries and make dinner for the first time this week.

Ex 2: After taking a quick survey through his apartment, he determined that nothing was missing and decided to leave it be for now and take a quick shower. Grabbing sleeping pants from his room, he wandered into the bathroom; already his mind was far away from the mystery and back towards the final touches of the promo that he was in charge of.

_(here- ch1)

The bathroom door opened and steam billowed out of the small room. Naruto stepped out, towel drying his hair as he wandered towards the kitchen. He paid no more attention to the Christmas gift in the corner of his living room as he poured a cup of water. A quick glance at the clock told him it was close to ten when the music started in the living room.

A cute ItaNaru fluff, though. (:

This was all very sweet.

:D That was lovely! So sweet!

I like how the story progressed, with Itachi sneaking in to leave the gifts. How sly of him. I kind of want to know where it goes; what happens next. I also like how you added the flashbacks towards the ending chapters, especially the explanation at the end.

But what was the promise that Naruto made to Itachi? I don't think you said, though maybe I missed it.

Well, lovely ItaNaru! 0 Great holiday cheer too. And I see you got it in by Christmas as well. That's awesome! I look forward to reading more from you!

HIhi
SO first off I'm soo sorry that I haven't put this up yet it got crazy all of a sudden and so yeah really I am sorry about thay,BUT I did give you a shout out on LJ you should go check me out the names way_wicked anywho yeah soo ah things to say AH on facebook I just sent 622 things of flair to my friends so I'll get the credits heheh...WHAT I was out of them just so you know.
And I will do the same thing next day to so HAHA my goal is to get 3 creidts why? I want to know if it goes that I'll aim for 10 creidts cause it will be cool to find out if they would let me get that much,WAOH thats a long carry on sentance...OMFG I just felt like that guy in those weird ass staple things you know when the guy goes WOAH THAT A LOW PRICE WOAH THATS A LOW PRICE over and over again?
Have you ever heard of omgele?
well its a chat room site but you really are strangers!
you don't even have to make up a nickname they do it for you I(your called you can the other guy is called stranger isn't that cool?
well I think so but anyway ACK FACEBOOK JUST WENT DOWN!1
NO
DEAR GOD I JUST GOT ALL THE CREIDTS NOT NOW
Sniffle life is so mean don’t ya think?
Well it was awesome to talk to you but I think I might head in soon going to watch castle bloodly awesome show?wait why did I tell you that you won’t know if I leave or not unless….your stalking me in which case you would have seen me give you the finger…unless of curse you aren’t stalking me
Gahh my eyes are burning!

Hey to you sorry it’s taken so long to work on this but my brother chase he has a lot of school work and hasn’t gotten of the computer for over 5 hours !Anyway life has been hard lately I have been in and iut if the ER and have spent more then a month in the place and have fallen behind my school work.
I’m homeschooled and the pressure is on for I’m going into high school and have a lot of work to catch up is always having me work around the house and it seems like she thinks I can get a days worth of work done within a few hours but I can’t and I don’t want to give up my evenings it’s 9:37 and I have just been able to get enough done to have a break.
I’m worried about what I’m gonna do, everything seems like it’s closing in so fast and I’m so scared about what’s going on with my life it just feels like everythings crashing done on me.\
Hahah anyway what am I doing you don’t want to hear about my life do you?
So moving away from my life and onto happy things have you seen torchwood?
It is amazing and just so good! And what I fondly call the gayest show ever (well that isn’t under gay genre (and yes it is real)to ever exist) and I’m in love with it.
Just a heads up about it though,don’t let the rents see it (if you still live with them you never said your age) by episode 3 you have a kiss between two guys and episode 2 has a girl on girl also has sex. Nothing that shows flesh but you can tell it is sex.
But still a great show. Ever watch doctor who? This is based off a character and from the show Captain Jack Harkness.
I also have a white board shrine to Itachi. Yes a shrine if only I could find the tools to make a true one for Itachi should have one.
WARNING IF YOUR NOT UP TO DATE ON THE ONLINE NARUTO MANGA SKIP THIS AND DON’T BITCH ABOUT SPOILERS!
He should have one after that whole thing with that guy bringing him back to life I mean WTF he should be able to rest in peace that justu is a curse that mocks the dead and all that they fought for when they were still alive!
END OF SPOILER.
So anyway that’s all for now it’s gotten late and I need to be finishing my show so I can get to bed have to get up at 5 mom wants to drag us all to the gym in the morning to something I look forward to at all.
Anyway I’m off and will talk to ya later. Night to you.
Hey I’m back and stuff. Have you noticed how there hasn’t been any updates for Naruto lately? My brother says that it’s because there is a festive going on in Japan so we won’t be getting anytime soon.
I’m on a break right now and it will be up soon so I’ll tell you about my morning. Mom woke everyone up before 6 and made us head up to the gym and work out for over an hour. I dread the next time that I have to do it for mom says that she will wake us up at 5 and have us workout for over 2 hours.
I feel dizzy right now mom made me take my ADHD pill and when I take it it makes my lightheaded and I feel like crap.
Wow over 926 words!
So it coming to a close I wonder if after reaching 10 word if it will be over 10 or not…
So anyway I’m soo sleepy and still have a shit load of math left to do.
So I have a party on Thursday and then maybe a movie Friday I’m going to see Iron Man the second anyway I think this might be enough so I’m gonna go look you up and see if that is 10
Ack only half way through this.
Okay so it’s gonna be mothers day soon. I don’t know what to buy well I’ll think of something someday.
Oh dear lord it’s so hot! I can’t believe that it’s only spring what will I do when summer comes I wonder?
Oh well I suppose that I’ll live…maybe anyway. So I hope that you have a great summer this year.
Any way after this I’ll go by the name way_wicked it’s my name on LJ here I’ll give you the link just minus the spaces and your good you’ll find an (hopefully) awesome shout out.
So I’m working my way though Torchwood season 1 and someone said that they meet up with a fake Jack Harkness and in true jack fashion instead of fighting they make out, Man I love Jack the one show where guys can kiss guys and girls can kiss girls and no one gives a damn about it.
So I did finish this and got it right then the stupid then froze and I had to shut down the thing. Then I more then made up for what I lost then the stupid thing erased all the hard work that I did and yeah I just sucks I was hoping to finish this and then this happened .
I guess that the others will be home soon and then I’ll have to stop, you see my family doesn’t know that I read yaoi and they would kill me…well mom and maybe dad will mom, dad is more relaxed about things like that and mom is REALLY uptight about it and my brother just won’t care about stuff like that.
Not only that but I’m bi which would piss my mom off and just don’t know how to break it to her. I don’t think that I’ll be telling her at all.
So there is a lot of more time left I hope and I would like to say thank you for letting me get it off my chest.
Will you be updating with anymore stories?
So right now behind me is my two birds and they are speaking to each other Oh? It seems my other bird has flown off somewhere and I don’t know where the other has gone…maybe in the kitchen.
OMFG NO FREAKING WAY OWEN GOT SHOT! WTF HE CAN’T DIE I LOVE HIM TO MUCH TO DIE!
NO HE DIES!
AND TOSH JUST ASKED HIM OUT TOO!
WHAT THE HELL THERE BRINGING HIM BACK NOW NO FREAKING WAY. You know what I’m done for now and will now finish with this whole torchwood thing for tonight. I am now on episode seven and will now be putting music on as I screw around on facebook and such before I get to caught up in the show…and too late… OH Jack came back and he says he’s bring Owen back and now the team just lost him again but I wonder if they get him back. Owen is still alive he was brought back for good it seems. So what happens to Owen he was brought back to life and h is life force has to come from someone out there and I don’t know who the plot says that DEATH brought him back what for I don’t know. Lets see is 1,565 words
Ok so I check and there is only 20 something charters left and you know what I have stuck in my head?
She’s on fire the old 80’s version and it rocks.
If you read -man then there’s this awesome story called Any way you want it.
It’s under Allen and it’s rated M but only for the langue they used it’s a work in progress and their working on it. I hope that I can get your review done in time I still have stuff that I have to do and mom got back with a whole list of things that I have to do.
OH and sorry I broke some of the rules I set for myself but you know rules were meant to be broken after all!
Ah! So close to the limit and yet so far. I wonder you remember me well that should be it all.
Hope to read more of your stories and well it’s been a long and stressing journey but it’s time for it to come to an end
Allons-y as the Doctor says.
Your friend Kickasslazy
Aka way_wicked
/way-wicked. Livejournal . com
Opps there's still a bit more to write so bear with me if I get cut off in the middle of something nearly there now come on we can do this you made it in time so I can make it though this. Thank you so much for writing that storie ypu made my whole week and it still makes me so happy when I'm re-reading it.I hope you check this other girl out not sure of her name she wrote under two names but the story is called "eyes of the broken soul' she got a few flamers and I guess she never had very much Confidence in the first place so I don't know. Butr you should read it it is there arond 700 characters left to type and my eyes are burning but I don't want to keep letting you down and I won't be able to get on much saturday for,you see my brother has many reports and essays to finish and dad wants me to get up and start on my work but I want,NoO I nNEED to finish not only for you but for me too. You ser I have trouble finishing what I started but I want to start myself only 300 or so characters left to type and then it will be iover you now what I'll sing a song
Ring around the Hemlock
Going for a littlew walk
frist time first time
losing my mind
the songs that I'll sing are by whoever wrote nursey rhymes for the damned well I don't know if I'll have time to put another song in so I'll make this quick it was fun and I hope you start writeing agian good

Thank you for the warm fuzzies. This is a very lovely story.

Great writing style, love itanaru i personally don't think there's enough of it. i also love the suspense and secrecy and how all the characters were used i did miss shika.

i wish the story could have an epi, or a follow up chappy. i wish to know how the love story ended i also notice you do great writing why not go into the more mature audience and give a lemon

i read this story twice back to back. great work