Hmm I wonder who is on top.

This was soooo cute! I like that you actually made me like Bella. Her relationship with Jacob was everything I had hoped it would've been. Awesome work!

brilliant well done. maybe a sequel?

This was really cute and very freaking humorous. I couldn't stop laughing! XD Also, I hate Bella. The reason I'm mentioning that is because you actually wrote Bella in a way that makes her a pretty good character instead of insufferably horrible one. If she was really like this, let's just say I actually wouldn't hate her.

Loved it...the friends relationship was so sweet

Much, much kudos for this! Lol. Completely in character, too! I LIKED Bella in this... That's never happened. Ever.

like bella's personality in one, a million times better then canon's bella in my opinion.

I like Twilight better this way XD

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YES.

your bella- flawless. your edward and jacob were perfectly in character. i laughed the whole time and the ending made me feel fuzzy.

woo~

Lov

I loved that :3

this story was so cute :)

hahaha... god that was funny! Edward and Jacob huh.. never thought of it at all.. nice!

Well if this doesn't make you wriggle, I don't know what will. PLEASE RE-WRITE TWILIGHT! I'M BEGGING YOU! D: I love this SOOOOOO much more than the original book! XD

Jakeward makes you wriggle? Lol, I haven't heard that one before.

But then again, Edward's as straight as a bendy ruler, so hey, anything's possible.

I thought he was as straight as a sparkly hair tie, personally.