WHY WOULD YOU END IT LIKE THAT?

This is really sad :( can't wait to read more of your stories.

you don't properly showcase Alec's and Jane's powers. I mean when Jane is much stronger than Victoria and she could have easily overpowered her.

umm Alec has red eyes not golden

You might want to remove this note as it is agains the sites rules and guidlines...chapter slots are only for chapters not author notes. It also disrupts the story line. But if its still needed put it at the end or begging of next chapter if its no longer valid id remove it.

This story is giving me a migraine i am moving on to find a better written one.

Five years to write this story and it never did you be getting to the point of this story anytime soon?

Who in the hell is this Desmond person and why did he just happened to show up the same time these Volturi guards story isn't making much sense. sure you are going to like this chapter since you wrote you didn't and are just posting it for some on doesn't Alec use his gift on this Desmond person and kill him,or have Jane use she has one of Aro's pets with a crush on her and what i gather is a hybrid also sniffing around about get to the point of the story.

I hope to hell this gets four Volturi guards come to Forks and instead of just grabbing her and take her to see Aro they enroll in school and expose themself to the humans which iswhat got her in trouble in the first Alec asks her to go out with him on a ? why not just snatch her then hunt down the squirrel munchers and bring them to Volterra also?

Humans can be so stupid they don't even question why these people look and act the way they of them just wonder how easy it will be to get them to have sex with them.

For some reason,I didnt cry on the last chapter

Cool story line but not very well written

i love it

I love the story, and no oftence, but that was a stupid ending. You should make a sequel, and alec and bella are the rulers of hell. And are seeking revenge. It would be better.

-A

Loved it