AWESOME!

Wow this is absolutely incredible! You are an amazing writer and completely capture Jayne and River in a very unique way. Thanks for the great read!

That was exceptionally descriptive. I'm very impressed with the imagery. Bravo!

wow... I loved this... Yes, it is disjointed, but that is River, and you wrote it just fine. This is supposed to be an incident that happened sometime after the movie, so there is no reference to anything we have already seen. That can be confusing to some, but I loved every convoluted moment of it.

XD

I like the end. The story itself is interesting but a little hard to follow despite that I like how it is all in river speak.