Amazing. I love how much depth and emotion you've added in to help form Karin's character. The emotion regarding the situation was done very nicely. Please continue, I look forward to more.

Update ASAP! This is a very interesting story and I like how it's different from the rest. I'm also interested as to what will happen between Karin and Ichigo's friends

Wow, this is truely a great fanfiction, touched my heart :') Please keep writing! This is amazing!

i like yur fic (: its very different and i like it
im waiting for the next update :33

okay you need to update like quickly i love the chapters A LOT you need to hurry and type up a new chapter!

When I said, "I think this is" I noticed I didn't finish the sentence when I went on to the next one. I wanted to say that this is great.

This is original. I don't care if you changed any of the characters or not, I still think this is update when you can. I won't pester you to update. I know how it feels to be demanded to do stuff, so take as much time as you need to write. I love this, so I'll keep reading.

Contrary to what people think writing an AU doesn't mean you can randomly change the characters personalities or backgrounds to suit your story, you're supposed to change the story to fit the characters. Ichigo running with a gang is reasonable as he has struggled with being outed for the coloring of his hair.

However, Isshin being an abusive prick... why? If this was so Karin's life matches your own I'm going to tell you to stop right there. You aren't the characters and the characters aren't yours. Original fiction is a better place if you really need to write a story based on your life troubles, rather then forcing the life troubles on another character.

If you're writing a story about a sensitive subject because you're dealing with bad feelings it also doesn't need to be exactly like your own story... it is actually better if it is different as writing reveals a lot about the writer and on the web anonymity is important. There is only so much you want to tell a complete stranger.

For example, you could just as easily have left them being twins, Ichigo's gang life would cause enough strife for the family and instead of being abused at school Yuzu was abused by the girls at school. Then, when Yuzu dies... THEN Isshin starts becoming a drunk, abusive prick BECAUSE the angel is gone and he couldn't save her. Make him even more protective of Karin too. It fits their family more and it makes more sense then making changes... for honestly what reason? Because it stroked your fancy? The good writers think about EVERY single decision they make including the changes to the canon.

Er...what happened? *Rubs aching neck* The emotions in this thing are giving me whiplash.

The first chapter was great, full of imagery and reasonable emotions and what have you. The second one was the complete opposite-Karin is laughing? What? Why? She seems so happy suddenly, and her sister just died. You don't recover from something like that in a night or a day or a year.

I thought you said this was going to be nitty-gritty?

Unfortunately, this chapter is anything but.

Also-if you hate having people demand you update (which is the norm for this site anyway) stop complaining that so few people are reviewing.

Your formating for this chapter also needs some work. In case you didn't know...there is an Edit tab in your document uploader screen and you can use that to go through and add spacing and what-not.

Better luck next chapter.

~Troublesome

Eek! Such a good story! I would LOVE to read more on this subject!

Hell I liked it! :)

Hell I liked it! :)

Mmmm, still seems pretty good. Loots and lots of feelings in it. Please update soon, ne?

plz continue with this story its interesting and sad it has a good touch plus there is missing stuff and ithink what you write next might just spice things up so plz finish the story

More!