run on sentences. please fix them.

Nearly done with this only to realize there is a sequel that is not complete...ugh.

I can't honestly say this story is good, the premise is good but the execution is horrible, no offense. To much time is spent in Reaper when he no real purpose in this story aside being a romantic interest for Rogue, I already pointing out how everyone just happens to know the right info or agree with whoever's even if they are spouting utter shite, and that was no real progress made in this story, not even any character development. It was just Harry had 2 soul bonds and they go to Xavier's institute, oh and Reaper.

.Oh and yes an wise person like Charles would be stupid enough to keep a secret from harry, that affects harry, even knowing that harry has been lied to or had things kept from him all his life.

Harry doesn't have a healing ability according to the ability list shown before, he asks for someone to teach him how to heal.

Honestly these conversations read like everyone is just saying whatever they want.

Reaper asksDoes that bother you?" Hermoine respondsYes I trust you."

Also why would his ability to heal the dead be a bad thing, his ability is literally the ability to kill on touch, the ability to resurrect is the good point. Maybe find something reasonable for Rogue to react to if you want drama.

No offense but the name for your OC is stupid, way too many names which all sound like first names. Should of just picked one like David Grimm or Alexander Grimm...etc.

Wasn't it pointed out that Voldemort could get through blood wards keyed to harry's blood? I guess it would work for Albus and company but honestly what could they do with Jean or Charles there.

Most powerful telepath is the world, can only kill half the order of the fried chicken in 10 while seconds. Really? The Phoenix could level a city in that time.

Goblins aren't natural polite, unless your changing even minor and admittedly interesting boys of canon. And while would an account manager to a wealthy account be working in the lobby?

I get giving family friends money in your will but no one would give away half their money when they have a legitimate heir, maybe 10-20% but no more, and that's generous.

Voldemort in canon was at least in his 60s. Also you sound like your are trying to make it sound like Riddle is innocent just because he had a bad life and Albus didn't help him, which is stupid. Unless he was hit with a curse or something that warped his mind, his actions are his and he deserves to burn for them.

I don't think it's your grammar or even your method of speech, it's more that everything is 'oh yeah so this happened that just happens to coincide with whatever you were thinking.' Work on writing your character to be more 'organic,' or maybe more natural. It's hard to describe, just read it out loud or something.

Right I know this is old but I still feel the need to point this out, it's the point of comments.

There are a lot of 'because' and 'I know' and 'that makes sense' when in reality it doesn't make sense.

Interesting start hope to see more soon.

Evil, not smart.

Interesting, a little fast, but good. Love Tonks, Hermione, & Luna with Harry.