*whistles* This is great!

this chapter has a few run on sentences and fragments that could be corrected. Other than that good chapter. Is Al's disorientation because he struck his head or is he reliving his trauma. The last part at the end was really interesting about him doing this and that because Ed said so. I sometimes wonder if he's like that in the manga/anima.

Still looking good and can't wait for an upate, but there was one sentence I didn't understand: "Fullmetal you walk your brother, he is off his face." Is that a typo or something? I can't make any sense of it.

Another good chapter, keep it up.

awesome story. very original. i wonder if al is really gonna forgive ed so easily, especially when he doesn't know what really happened?

Yeah it was kind of short, but still good, and still reading and reviewing so please update this again.

That place is horriable, I hope Ed's plan works, can't wait for the next chapter.

ah i hope the team bust them out soon! but will al be the same after being in the prison for so long? i'm really looking forward to the next chapters :D

Aww bless them, the brotherly love is still there. I can't wait to find out what happens next. You're building up the tension quite well.

This is a good story, I really want to find out what happens next.

I like how well you've done the characters, there recognisable yet still different because of the different live's they've lead, it adds so much depth to the story.

I can't wait to read more.

i was so excited when i got an email saying that a new chapter is up :D that explains why ed "abandoned" his brother! I'm so glad he didn't just leave. ooh, mustang is here! i wonder what the thing that ed could ruin is! I cant wait to find out :D

i think i maaged to miss the last chapter! but still, it was very good :D and thats ok, i understand bout exams and stuff, its stressful. just update when you can, k? don't leave me hanging XD

you write really well, awesome chappy update soon.

I liked it, you need to keep this up. It's epic.

you've got a really good story idea here.I'm intrigued by the reason for Ed leaving and Al insisting on being left behind, while ed refuses it. who is right?both maybe. xD

I think your writng is well, but you should revise some grammar, like puntuation. Other than that, i believe is good! so keep writing. :D