Good premise, but needs to be cleaned up some by a beta. Just way to many run on sentences and grammatical errors. Other than the technical errors though, it was a great story. Good job!

Good story but you shouldn't put so many commas. Break those long sentences into smaller ones. Change most of the commas into periods.

The writing was a bit sloppy, and I think it wasn't very romantic... Its better than a lot of the work on here though.
Also, the new moon is every four weeks, not two. A new moon is the time of month when the earths shadow completely obscures the moon, opposite of a full moon. The time of month when Inuyasha turns human.

"Tonight was the night that happened every two weeks, Inuyasha turned into a human just for tonight..."

Loved it

That was awesome! I love it!

Wow. You're really good at writing lemons.

Pretty good lemon, you managed to keep them pretty much in character. So far this was the best written Inuyasha Kagome lemon that I've read in a while. Although I found it a little difficult to understand who was talking at first since you put Kagome's dialogue and then at the end insert "Inuyasha responded" only to have his dialogue come next. Otherwise, It was pretty well written.

This was sweet in its own way. :) All I would suggest is that the dialogue be broken up better because sometimes I couldn't tell who was speaking. Otherwise, good job. :)

Kagome17;

What kinda fairy tale world do you live in where people only have sex when they're married?

I thought it was great.

Keep on writing!

This was so good I Want to read it again soon.

hey!

I love it!

it was zo amazing it was so sweet

oww my

cheers

Love

Melanyl

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... Uh... Now I see why u rated it mature... That was scary! U put way to much detail! Thats not romance in my mind! They arent even married!

this was a good story.

the only thing i noticed was you kept switching between past and present tense verbs. and you used the word "then" a lot.

other than that it was a good and well written story.

well you are obviously more blunt about the two lower regions compared to other stories i've read, not that its a bad thing. you did great and i think my favorite tpart that you put in here is the 'i love you' parts. keep up the good work and good luck on your next story. :)

Loved it. KUDOS!