Oh snap need more I love this

Hoping for more.

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I don't think you write immaturely. I loved it. Especially the part where Bella was thinking about going all ninja on Jacob and pulling a sword out her ass, that had me laughing out loud, literally, at work no less. I usually don't review but this story is totally funny and totally making me hate Alice. She used to be my favorite but the more Bella/Jasper stories I read, the more I dislike Alice and Edward.

I love this story!
Please please please update soon as you can
I can't wait to read what happens next :)
~ Belle

Awesome start

Love the story!

Pls pls pls update soon

My thought while reading this was: "How the heck can Alice cheat on him when she can get kisses like that for eternity?"

Why was Jasper so mad? Is he mad at Bella?

I liked the storyline, and I thought that the bits of humor were very funny, but I won't be reading this anymore. I don't like the text chat in whatever chapter it was, and the overall grammar isn't very good. I dislike the turn it took in chapter 15 so I'm out.

please continue writting the story

Plz Update

One of the best stories I’ve read!

No offesnse but cut the text chat. It's extremely annoying, sure I get it if it's an emergency or once in a while but write correct grammar not suga or some other stupid thing.