Too short. You need to continue with Winry and Ed's conversation! It could make the story more detailed..., so that it is easier to understand...

Aw.

That's cute.

Ahh so cute, I loved it! I really love to see a well-written one-shot like this, especially with all correct grammar and spelling (seeing as I'm a bit of a spelling freak!).

Keep up the good work!

Aww, I thought it was really sweet! And well-written, too-the grammar was good, and I love that you set it up but then left us to imagine the rest, since we all knew what would happen. I also loved how you played with the theme of Ed wanting to be different from his father. He really would, too! And I think it really would happen this way, too. Or some way similar. Once Ed felt ready, he'd make it happen, without pomp or circumstance, just himself, because that's all that matters anyway, right?

It's romantic without making me even remotely nauseous. It's realistically and simply beautiful, which is the best! :) Thank you for sharing! :D