This is a REALLY CUTE and REALLY FUNNY story. I honestly wished it would be longer because it was a lot of fun! The banter between Guy and Asch is so funny. I especially loved them chucking things at each other at the end... Somehow, I could see this being their sort of relationship if they ever did have the chance to make up... hahaha...! Nice work~!

i love this story it has so many funny and cute parts in it!

I love your interactions between the characters, it was really interesting to read. I love the ending with the fighting with the pine cones and rocks. I was laughing.

*laughs at the ending* Wonderful. Just wonderful... Congrats, Luke, it seems your plan worked.

"stormed off to broad"? Don't you mean "stormed off to brood"?

Well written. Great read. Win for Luke and Mieu!

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Usually I don't go into a fanfiction without knowing exactly what the subject is, but your tagline was interesting enough that I was drawn in. And I'm very happy that I did so.

I loved all of the interactions. Asch and Guy's subtle hints of reluctant friendship made me gleeful, and Luke's absent gestures of scratching Mieu's ear just seemed so natural and friendly.

The fall down the hill was quite suspenseful, and your descriptions of the physical sensations of tumbling down, bracing themselves against the rain of rocks, and the discomfort of being lodged together really sucked me in and made me imagine I felt it too. Definitely the most fun and suspenseful part to read. :D

The description of the forest was another favorite point, which I thought was a pretty vivid depiction. I dunno, just the whole 'skeleton trees' bit and the cool idea of it being deceptively innocent on the outside and dangerously dead on the inside made me happy.

As an improvement, I'd have to say that Mieu was rather out of character. He was rather more wise than usual- while I will admit to his occasional bursts of acute wisdom, he's still a child- and I think he's too reverent to call Luke an idiot. But that certainly didn't stop me from really enjoying this fanfiction.

Overall, a this was a fun and somewhat suspenseful read. Probably my favorite AschGuy story to date! Always keep writing~ :)