So far, so good. The pacing on the romance could have been a bit less rushed, especially in the beginning stages. Klavier has worked with Ema for how long? Yet the pacing is more apropos to live at first sight.

Aside from that and a few capitalization and punctuation errors, it's so far, so good.

Hi xStormyx. This whole story about Ema and Klavier Gavin is very interesting and quite sad at the end. although you did good at it in my opinion.

I just read this entire thing in one sitting and it was amazing. A little confused by the last chapter, but as you said, I guess it'll make sense later. Great job.

Sorry, I'm just rereading this entire trilogy and I just have a couple questions and remarks as of right now: it's not the right chapter, but I was wondering what phoenix was saying snackoos reminded him of that made Ema try to deny it?

Also side remark for this chapter now that I'm rereading it: Deston is legit the best wingman ever omg

Well this is...disappointing... I'm sorry if I sound like a hater, but I assure you, I am not. Take it as constructive criticism.

Your original character has made the main game series characters (Klavier and Ema, and other Ace Attorney characters) look and seemed very overshadowed, like Deston has taken the spotlight. The main purpose is lost in this one. Also, you made Klavier sound like he's sorta obsessed with Ema, but maybe that's just the way you play with words? Which I find is too much, and Ema sounds like she is pissed at EVERYTHING, and every single little thing that comes along, I felt that it's a bit unnecessary. Yes, she is grumpy and moody, but there's a VAST difference between being grumpy AND being frustrated and pissed on tiny little things. Like, grumpy silently muttering and grumbling, Pissed/Frustrated Screaming and blaming people when they didn't do anything wrong.

I apologize again, but I suppose it's just not up to my taste, so I stopped reading.

The story got way out of hand and too long winded, imo. The same goes with inserting an OC as a *love interest to the game character. I can say this isn't my cup of tea in the end, but good job for all that brainstorming and typing.

Your story is so awesome. All of the elements of the story is balanced out.

This series killed me.
I read about 6 or 7 chapters per day and I hated sleeping because that meant I couldn't 's truly addicting, great in every morning the first thing I did was read a few more chapters of this.

After obsessing over them for so long I've managed to get sick of them...

But your refreshing writing style and creativity made me love them all over again.

THIS IS SO ADORABLE! The scenes, as well as the way the two of them speak and act, is so accurate to the game it only makes it all the more adorable.

Well done, very well done... I can't wait to read the rest, hehe.

this story was bombtastic! Can't wait to read the second part!

Yes! I just Knew Deston was innocent! Yes! xD

Hell yeah! Please tell me Deston was as badass and good as always and there was simply some sort of misunderstanding; Please?

Damnit! No! Don't tell me he's trying to set Klavier and Ema together! I kinda really want Deston and Ema to be together! :/D ...Unless, there's something more sinister going afoot! LeGasp!

Wow, the beginning of your poem is so beautiful and fits so wonderfully. I'm really impressed and find the poem absolutely amazing and well done. You really get into the mind of how Klavier would feel. I personally think Daryan would do what he did in a classic example of Nietzsche thinking: Be careful when you battle with monsters, lest you become one yourself. What do you think? I think he wouldn't simply steal a cacoon for no reason. He must have slowly been turning into a criminal himself after working with them for so long.

Aiyahh! I'm loving this story! 3 3 I'm practically in love with your OC too! You do him justice ;D