Ah, I'm so sad this is done because this was one story were Lindsay's strength and determined will to survive was excellently shown. Even the team working behind the scenes to get to her was excellent, you gave everyone their moment to shine! So thank you on that. I'm so glad it was Sheldon who found her, I can see how he would want to check her out to make sure she was okay before getting her back to the house and the ambulance.

But it was Lindsay's thoughts on how she made it and the other women didn't that touched me. Even Danny and how he could have doubted his wife was awesome, I hope he knows what a lucky man he is. :) I adored how the three of them were holding each other in Lucy's bedroom. Lindsay's worry will always be with her, that is the price of being a mom. I just hope that she won't take over her life again. You don't know how much EVIL SATISFACTION that I got when the scumbag threw himself against the glass! HA! I love it when Lindsay gets underneath the perp's skin. Danny waiting in the car, that was so him. Very lovely. All in all this has been one of the best stories I have read, thank you so much for sharing it with us. :) And I will be looking forward to more.

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"But the question remained unfinished as he began to guide her slowly away from the horror and doubt of the past days, down the steep slope to the familiar squad cars and the over bright lights of the ambulance, to a place where she had all the time in the world, where she could return to her job, her life and her family, to where she belonged, a privilege that had been denied to all the women who had died, alone, in a too nice house, in the middle of nowhere, on the top of a hill, anonymous and brutalized, murdered and buried, but never having peace."

"He wondered why he had ever doubted that she would make it, if he had assumed she had spent all her luck when she was fourteen. But then he had seen the man on the bathroom floor, the man who was at least three times the size of his wife, the man who could have killed her, and he had realized then that she made her own luck, that they all did, and that he would never again underestimate her ability to take care of herself. Plenty of people took bullets. Plenty of people died. Jess had done both, had reminded them all that they were still only human. Watching the ambulance winding it's way towards him in the darkness, he had no idea how Don had managed to deal with the loss of the woman he had loved, that he still loved but would never see again.

And then it was as though everything sped up, going into hyperdrive. The ambulance came to a stop on the gravel nearby and the back doors were thrown open from within. Danny couldn't get there fast enough, launching himself into the compartment, to make his own judgement on whether his wife was alright or not, as she smiled grimly, bravely, at him before allowing him to wrap her in his arms, to feel each breath that she took and listen to the sound of her heartbeat. The blood on her face and her arms would wash away, and the wounds and scrapes and cuts would go away, some leaving scars, others not. The memories would fade and Lindsay would be alright after all."

"She couldn't help but wonder how she would ever be able to keep her daughter safe in such a dangerous world, where getting pizza with your friends ended in the loss of life and innocence, where putting a man behind bars was no guarantee of stopping the horror that he spread, and she wondered, by the look on Danny's face if he wasn't thinking the same thing, if he wasn't considering all those whom he had tried, and failed to protect; Reuben, his brother, even Aiden, and now her and Lucy. But even as she stood, warm and safe in her husbands arms, in her own apartment, far away from anyone who had ever tried to hurt her, she couldn't help but picture a fourteen year old girl cowering on the floor of a public washroom, listening as her best friends were murdered, as sheer luck and a matter of seconds saved her life and ensured her future, and she wondered if her own daughter might not be so lucky, whether Lucy might not someday be the one on the wrong end of a shotgun while someone else was granted another chance, while some other family watched guiltily as their world fell apart."

"They exited the gate and crossed to the vehicle where Danny sat, sulking disapprovingly behind the wheel, but Mac was still able to pick up on the way Danny lit up when Lindsay appeared, the way he allowed her to pull him out of his slump, the relief and joy that was still evident in his expression, the wonder at how he had ever gotten so lucky, at Lindsay's strength, and how she hadn't been taken from him against all odds. Watching them together, after all the things that they had been through, both together and apart, Mac knew that somehow they would be alright."

I have to say, this is definitely one of the best kidnapped-Lindsay stories out there. Too many have Danny completely fall to pieces, and be nothing more than a dead-weight during the investigation, and a liability during the rescue mission. It's refreshing to see someone who thinks slightly differently.

The storyline is fairly convincing, very believeable. Your spelling and grammar is, for the most part, correct.

I'm afraid I can't really think of much else to say right now (although I'm certain that if I stayed here for long enough, I might...), other than that this is a pretty damn good story, and that you're a pretty damn good writer.

~TheAngel'sWings

I cannot wait for the final chapter. And I agree with your sentiments conserning the season finale. Update soon :)

You don't know how excited I was to see this updated! :D Danny is letting his hate cloud his judgment, I love it but he needs to focus on finding Lindsay. But these are the type of thoughts I can see running through his brain as he sees the house.

God, I hope that Lindsay is alright. That the shots over her head are from the team's guns. She has to have more time with her family. I do love that she is still fighting, it shows that nothing will take her.

Knowing Lindsay like he does, Mac is so awesome in here. I can't believe the uni thought it was one of Dean's own men who knocked out a fellow henchman.

Don's reaction to the crap that was spewing from that slime ball's mouth was glorious! Will Danny freak out at these words and the thoughts that it provokes?

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"He hated the house from the moment he set eyes on it, from the way it loomed mockingly out of the darkness, so open, as though flaunting what it had done to him and his. He hated the curve of the arch over the door and the dim lighting that peaked out from beneath the drawn blinds, giving the illusion of a simple summer home where children could run in the forest and couples could look at the stars. He hated that they hadn't arrived sooner, and he hated the thought of Lindsay suffering somewhere on the other side of the door, drugs running in her veins as Jared Dean's foul henchmen did unspeakable things to her. Was he too late?

He didn't remember the car pulling to a stop or his door being flung open as he flew from the vehicle, but the next thing he knew he felt arms grappling to get a hold of him and he turned on his own captor, gun in hand, to find that it was only Stella who was doing her best to hold him. Her small hands held him back from storming the building as Flack began to direct the Swat team in the surrounding of the house.

He would not be allowed to get involved of course, for legal reasons, but mostly he knew that Stella was stopping him for fear of what they might find in the house."

"A shot flew over her head, whether as a warning or a taunt, and there was nothing for it but to try. She wouldn't sit around waiting to be executed. A rushing sound filled her ears and then cleared, and the sounds of the forest became clear and sharp all around her, the silence broken by feet in the underbrush. Taking a deep breath she struggled to her feet once again and started forward, only for her ankle to give out beneath her once more, bringing her back onto her hands and knees, her weapon still nowhere to be found, every part of her aching with defeat.

She fought the tears that pricked at her eyes as she allowed the faces of her husband and daughter to swim through her mind. She shut her eyes tightly, her head bowed, wondering if she might have it in her to make one last attempt at survival.

A gentle, sickening laughter sounded behind her, and she couldn't help but wonder if it would be the last thing she would ever hear as two shots rent the air."

YES! I saw it and it was fantastic! Who doesn't love that Shane is still alive! I have so many different scenarios that have been running through my mind at what is going to happen. I can't wait till the premiere.

I hope this is not the end of it, or Lindsay! She is so close to freedom with Mac and the team at the house! Or I hope that is them with the sirens. They should have never messed with a country girl who could shoot and run around the woods like this.

She was so smart in keeping to the trees to avoid that sniper, but the rock trick...NICE! I hope that they aren't tracking her by the blood coming from her feet, I'm worried about that. Please continue this, I hope that Danny and the team finds her quick. I can't believe that they shot her! But please tell me it didn't knock the breath out of her, she will huddle beneath that huge boulder and wait for Danny to find her. Or least try and find the gun that slipped from her grasp. You have me on pins and needles wanting to see what happened. This is an excellent story and I hope to see more. :) My only regret is that I was listening to Requiem For A Dream while reading this chapter, not good for my blood pressure.

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"It was a blessing and a curse, faster to lose herself from the sight of her captors, faster to fall or to lose herself completely. Her only real hope was Mac, and Danny, and Stella and the others.
It was a question of time only, how long it would take them to figure it all out, to round up the man power. But they would manage, she knew, as they always did, would race to the mountains, sirens blaring, guns drawn. But would they make it in time? Would she still be alive then or would they have to hold Danny back so as to keep him from seeing his wives' bullet ridden corpse? It was not a pleasant thought.
She veered through the low shrubbery nearest to the top of the incline and started down, winding into the trees as quickly as she could, though the cover was still thin. Her best chance would be if they thought she had gone out the front door. She had no shoes after all. Who in their right mind would go for a hike down the side of a mountain with bare feet? Every ounce of her tingled, in anticipation, in fear, in desperation, and she clung tighter to her only weapon."

"All she had to do was get lost in the woods until back up arrived. She knew it sounded simpler than it would be, but that was where the gun came in handy, and her own survival instincts."

"She wound back and forth through the maze of trees, all the better to dodge bullets as gunshots sounded behind her and she ducked her head instinctively, flinching against the thought of hot lead ripping into her body, even as they embedded themselves in the softwood around her. She would never again take her kevlar vest for granted, if she survived at least.
She matched their shots every chance she got, though she had no time at all to calculate angles or aim as she fled. Still, a cry of pain and fury told her that she had hit, or at the very least grazed her mark, or one of them.
She could no longer make out any sirens, whether in the distance or close by. Her ears rang and her whole body ached. Her feet were bloody, as was her arm. Her eyes blurred dizzily, affected by the earlier blow to the head and the resulting concussion, though the adrenaline and panic had pushed aside her nausea, at least temporarily.
Fire tore through her arm as she leapt over a large boulder and fell, her ankle twisting beneath her, her body crumpling onto the hard ground, her weapon slipping from her grasp."

This is Lindsay at her best, in cop mode trying to outwit the brainless and get herself to freedom. The way she was checking herself out to makes sure noting was broken was brilliant. She is holding it together well. I love how she put on the whiny act to get to the bathroom in order to rid her system of the drugs and to outmaneuver Blondie. I hope it was his gun and not something else. She is extremely smart in here, I have to say thank you for showing it in here. :)

I hope that she marked him with the ceramic lid, so that way every time he looks in the mirror he remembers her! There are many wonderful and amazing lines but here are my favorites:

"Warmth. She could feel the sun on her face. Sweat trickled uncomfortably down her neck, through her hair. Her shirt was damp, sticking to her clammy skin, but her feet were oddly cool and she realized that her shoes had been removed. She almost smiled to herself, considering the advantage of being a farm girl, running around barefoot in the fields for years. Going shoeless wasn't about to stop her from making a break for it first chance she got."

"What she wanted most of all was to start all over again, to wake up once more next to Danny and Lucy and know just how lucky she really was, to feel safe, and loved and happy again, because she had no idea if she would ever see them again. What had she been thinking, taking Lucy with her to lunch. Would that one mistake cost her her child? Would she ever even know or would her decision cost Danny his entire family? Could he survive something like that? And it would be her fault, for letting her guard down, for putting herself and their daughter at risk, and allowing Jared Dean and his moronic minions to get the better of her.
"I'm sorry" she whispered, just in case, though she was nowhere near giving up."

Mac is a maestro in handing criminals. God, I wanted to strangle that BASTARD when he asked Mac if he had a piece of that or tapped it. Please tell me that NY has the electric chair for this scumbag! But it was awesome to see Mac cool and laid back watching all of the anger and plans for Lindsay fall out of Jared's mouth. WONDERFUL!

And Michaela, I'm sorry but I can't feel sorry for her anymore. I know that she was the lure and started to help Lindsay at the end but after killing Tony...why didn't she at least help Lucy? I was wrong in my review of chapter 3, now I wish that Danny had busted through the door and shook her. I could kiss Don for his skills in this room, the way she shrunk back from him...AWESOME! But they have a location now! I hope its not too late.

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"Mac didn't react and he began to wonder whether the glass was really there to protect the visitor or the prisoner. Lindsay's time was running out."

"I couldn't let them do that to Lindsay. I was the one who got her involved, I was the one who lured her there, I told her I needed to talk to someone. But then she brought her daughter, and when Tony grabbed her... they weren't paying attention to me at all. Lindsay might have gotten away from all three of them but they were holding her down and then Tony injected her with something, I don't know what, and she went all limp, and she was just staring up at me, and she told me to run. She was trying to save my life even though she couldn't save her own."
The young woman was crying now, twisting her hair between her fingers and ringing her hands, but as Don listened to what had happened to his friend he had trouble feeling sorry for the person who was responsible for it all. He couldn't even imagine what Danny was thinking behind the glass. He was surprised that the CSI hadn't busted into the room yet."

"Do you think we'll make it?" Don asked, already hastening from the room and down the hall with Danny on his heels, his face white as if he had seen a ghost, his hands shaking in fury.
"Well, were sure as hell gonna try" Mac replied. "SWATs meeting us there."

Crap was this intense...so Lindsay helped put away this bad guy and now his son and his girlfriend helped in maneuvering Lindsay into a position to be kidnapped...I would feel sorry for Michaela but. No, I refuse to feel sorry for her, Lindsay did all that she could to help, even while she was being kidnapped.

I just want to hug Danny for all of the pain he is going through now, with the fear of what is happening to Lindsay and what could have happened to Lucy. I loved the moment where Stella had to take Lucy from him because she needed to be checked out and how he was accidentally hurting her with his clinging. All of this is so sad. Don and his interrogation of Michaela, was magnificent! You could feel his anger and lack of patience whenever a case like this hits close to home. All of the team members here are outstanding in their portrayal.

I am surprised that Danny didn't rush in and shake her, but I'm glad he didn't.

Favorite lines

"He couldn't think straight, couldn't put together any scenarios in his head, couldn't remember what she had told him. He could see her face, talking to him, her lips moving, but no sound came out, no sound reached him. He knew that the other's would be there soon, they had a second crime scene, they had to find Lindsay before it was too late. And if it was already too late? He closed his eyes and pressed his face into Lucy's thin blonde hair. The little girl whined, squirming in his arms.
"Danny!"
"Danny?"
He felt hands pulling roughly at his arms. He opened his eyes and found Stella in front of him, trying to take Lucy away. He didn't want to let her go.
"Danny, give her to me. Sheldon's going to take a look at her." Her voice was forceful, demanding. He looked down at his daughter, he was holding her too tightly, he might be hurting her. He released Lucy and Stella took her, swinging her onto her hip. Lucy stopped crying."

"Where' s Lucy?" he demanded, looking around, an ever present fear that he had failed to protect her lingering over his shoulders. And she wasn't the only one that he hadn't protected."

"The way I see it Michaela, you're going down for murder and child endangerment. You'll want to help yourself out here, cause Lindsay's not here to do it for you, you see, she's missing, and I don't like it when stuff happens to my friends so I think it would be better for both of us if you started talking to me."
Michaela was staring down at her hands in her lap, her expression unreadable, but when she looked up again the anger and hatred was gone, leaving only the fear behind. Danny might have felt sorry for her under any other circumstances."

"Michaela shook her head violently, her eyes filled with tears. Danny had a sudden urge to rush into the interrogation room and shake her. Her life seemed rather insignificant next to Lindsay's."

I love this chapter because Lindsay is thinking like a mom and a CSI in here. She is strong in trying to find out what happened to her, find a weapon to defend herself, and to leave enough evidence to lead the team to her. But I love how all of her thoughts are on Danny and Lucy, trying to stay alive for them.

Who is Jared Dean and what does he want with Lindsay?

Favorite lines

"She couldn't just disappear like this, damn it, she told herself, she wouldn't. She brought up Danny's face in her head, the look he had had that morning. She had woken to find him asleep beside her with Lucy lying on his bare chest. Danny had opened his eyes and smiled a smile that was only for her. She had never loved either of them more than she had at that moment. It wasn't going to end like this. Lucy would know her mother.
She kicked herself into CSI mode, on the hopes that someone was looking for her and might find evidence that would lead to her recovery. She had to believe that they would. Her colleagues were the best, they had solved so many cases with very little to go on and she was almost praying that this would be the same. She hadn't survived when she was fourteen only to die now. "

"A trickle of blood blurred her vision momentarily and she knew she was right about being hit. Someone had hit her hard enough to draw blood. Holding her breath, she pressed her head down and rubbed it along. She knew she was probably infecting her wound with all kinds of dirt but she could hope that whatever happened when she got out of the truck, that no matter how hard these guys tried, they wouldn't be able to hide the blood from luminal."

"She forced herself to breath evenly and she denied herself the comfort of tears, she wouldn't give them the satisfaction. She wouldn't cry, not until she saw her daughter again, her husband, hell anyone at all. Don, Stella, Mac, Sheldon, even Adam. She longed for a familiar face. She swallowed again, refusing to acknowledge the pain or the nausea. The only thing that mattered was staying alive."

"You'll pay for this detectives' a harsh voice sounded in the back of her mind. 'When your least expecting it'. There had been more but she couldn't quite recall. They had been empty threats, the man was spending the rest of his life in jail.
"Jared Dean says hello" one of her captors whispered low in her ear, his rough accent grating as he spoke the name that she hadn't heard in almost two years.
"He's a patient guy" she said, satisfied to hear that her voice was steady."

First have to apologize for missing this story on the first time it appeared, because this hooked me right from the beginning with Don's smart attitude and his kindness toward the rookie. Mac was funny when Don asked for an update after only two minutes of work.

Danny, jealous of Lindsay's day off, LMAO! But I can't believe the ending! Poor Lucy to be stuck in a car with the sweltering heat! Thank god, he found her. Danny is not going to be happy. Though it is burning hot in this story, these lines were chilling.

Favorite lines "The metal handle burned his skin as he touched it. He was not looking forward to getting into the vehicular oven.

The sound of a crying child made him turn quickly, searching for the source, and his eyes came to rest on the car that he had mistaken earlier as Lindsay's. The sound of the crying child was coming from within the sweltering hot car. He wondered how long it had been there, baking in the sun.

He crossed the distance in a few quick strides and shoved his face up against the tinted window of the back seat in order to see inside.

Lucy Messer stared back out at him."

Another on the edge of your seat chapter. I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter. I'll be waiting anxiously for the next chapters. I'm eager to see how Danny reacts when he gets to the summer home. I can imagine Mac and Flack having a very difficult time holding him back. Keep it up!

plz plz plz review this is one of the best stories ever

Oh my gosh, Lindsay!Update soon!

Ooh, this definitely has a gripping start! Very nicely written. Can't wait to see what happens next and how/where they will find Linds. Hope she is okay in the end, but ya know, a bit of angst and worry along the way is def. okay. :)

So where's Lindsay then, and when are you going to put us out of our misery and let us know?

Love the descriptive way you have of writing, I can really see the edginess and uncomfortable surroundings that they're in, and am actually wondering what on earth Lindsay was doing around there in the first place.

Can't wait to read more.

C