i hated how rose acted in the lounge...wish you woulda changed it. She thinks jesse is cute and wanted to get down and dirty with him...nothing wrong with that. when dimitri confronted her she should have told him to go fuck himself. she can kiss whoever the hell she wants not like he hasn't been with girls im sure he had his share back at his academy shes done nothing wrong!

I love it !

It's just like the book!write your own...be creative

So far it's really good. I have one complaint, however. In the middle of this chapter, the sentence, or more specifically the phrase "...for some rease it really annoyed me." made me frown a bit. Jealousy is a really hard emotion to express but you almost had it down pat. It seems that a lot of people speak (or think) in short sentences when they're jealous. You could try something like: I could see them all admiring her as we ran. This bothered me. "Good form, Rose!" one of the guys shouted. She grinned and waved to him. Rose wasn't helping.

Or something like that...hehe. Otherwise, its really good, and its rare that I only find one or two mistakes in a piece of work. Good job!

it seems like Dimitri had a bad case of lust back there. your really good at this so please write more stories like this!

I've read both chapters and they were really good. Keep up the good work :-)

EXCELLENT!

Hope you can add more to this story!

xx

This is really good! Are you gonna do anymore scenes from the book?

I LOVE YOUR WRITING please keep it up!

This chapter was beyond amazing. You brought me to tears, lol, no joke. This reminds me so much of Dimitri & it shows the little hints of when they were first falling in love : )

So good and of course he would be jealous and of course he wouldn't really understand or like it. So good!

Great job as always keep it up can't wait for the next part

i thought it was good! i really like reading the a story from diferent peoples pov.

This was a great Dimitri POV and I've always loved that scene where they find the animal & Rose snaps at Dimitri : )

YAY!

Another story from you!

And wow this is great, you have an amazing way of writing and you are able to to get inside Dimitri's head and write perfectly about what he says and does!

GREAT JOB!

love your work!