| Reviews for Bee Pregnant |
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  XVEUe chapter 1 . 9/3/2018 Veri n1c348jst0ritA |
 Artemis Jane chapter 2 . 3/23/2014 Not to be rude, I promise, but have you ever heard of paragraphing? Everytime the speaker switches it's a new paragraph. The way you wrote is confusing and I'm not exactly sure what it means. I could edit it if you want just pm me if you want me to. I really like it it just needs a little work. Trust me, if I didn't think you were a good writer I wouldn't give you constructive critisism |
| Artemis Jane chapter 1 . 3/23/2014 Like it but that was an unrealistic convo and moved way too fast |
| Guest chapter 2 . 4/14/2013 It's a little cheesy but please continue! |
| aholebullsheet chapter 2 . 9/7/2012 please-continue!pleaseeeeeeee |
| McKessie Taylor chapter 2 . 7/29/2012 whoa! |
| Monkey55 chapter 2 . 11/13/2011 I thought it was a little confusing, but the part I got was very good! |
| not.in.hufflepuff chapter 2 . 10/2/2011 I really liked it. The whole time I was reading the book I was waiting for a moment like this! But for 1. Type your story into Word first and use SPELL CHECK! 2. Space your story into paragraphs. Each time someone new is talking start a new paragraph. It will make it a lot easier to read. But yes this is great! Keep writing! |
| GilmoreGirlsAddict - Rogan Fan chapter 1 . 3/28/2011 awsome story please update |
| Hannah Dewe chapter 1 . 1/31/2011 you need to make your storys bigger |
| kkkkkkklll chapter 1 . 8/1/2010 okay... |
