Well I can see how you said it was slightly confusing...but oly a little bit in the very beginning! This story really was good, I like it a lot! And I beg to differ, I think your story did the complete opposite of dying at the end; it only died because the story was over. Those are just my thoughts.

I read this story on the 9 forum, and it's STILL amazing to me. The way you wrote it is just...So believable!

Really really amazing job!