He left her alone for 90 years, abandoned her. Even if he was a newborn and was screwed up in the head when he bit her he should have tried to find her after he got his shit together. There is no excuse for him to have bitten Bella and just forgotten her. I don’t like this Edward.

Okay no offense or anything but this is BS. What Victoria did should technically have been punishable by death by the Volturi for exposing that vampires exist

One thing I'd like to point out is that your story isn't keeping with the times, you know. People's mannerisms and actions don't agree with the fact that it's 1918.
But it's a really good effort!
Dont feel Down!

This is weird. Edward changed Bella b/c he loved her and knew
She was a vampire, yet never ever tried to find her no matter
The circumstance. 90 years later he has Victoria as a gf yet he loves Bella whom he knew to be a vampire and is "alive".

If he changed Bella b/c he loved her, I would think he would have kept his eyes on her for all times and would never have a gf since he loved Bella so much to even change her.

What a surprise

She shouldn't be so forgiving

So sad

Nice story so far

Interesting spelling! Great fun, good imagination xxx

Wasn't Bella thinking about how all of the purple flowers had died since she and Edward ventured to the medow? And now suddenly, Edward picked one of these long lost flowers that have appeared everywhere. Strange...

It really doesnt feel like 1918, cuz people especially, girls, back then, weren't so free. So Bella coudnt have had been with Edward, alone, since he is a boy. Also,the conversations weren't so casual.

So, you have got some factual errors..

otherwise, the story line is quite captivating. But had it been a little realistic.

I love it

The last part was so sad( glad Bella punched victorians but I think Bella should be more confident and less of a scary cat…

This is all kinda like a depressing mood but it figures…wish I could do the tree branching thing.

The dogs seen to ve getting a bit tamed I should say I didn't even know sorry was in their vocabulary lol! I love bagging on them it so much fun! Wish I could find a story like well I have but it hadn't been updated in a while…well little time so villa could kearn a few trucks to at least survive for awhile.