Fight the power! XD Not bad, it was a good idea. Kinda sad that you killed Ichi though... I'm glad Hichigo was such a good person as Ichigo though, totally didn't see the Orihime thing coming. \\\ proud of him! Good job, un!

...while i was reading this...

"this is halloween" was playing on my computer.

...O_O

but i love this, so cool!

XD zOMG!

I love how you portray the story; it feels like for once, you actually showed Hichigo's point of view.

(Truthfully, I don't really like Hichi-bashing. It's like people expect that he's going to dominate the world if he becomes king and stuff...and even if it's true, Hichi-kun would still need to fight alot of enemies; namely the shinigamis...and Aizen? o-o.)

woah! That was intense! I loved it! The description is so rich and I felt as though I were there! I really liked the dialogue of Hichigo and how you describe Ichigo's last moments. Just amazing!

I enjoyed this story for both its interesting twist, and also for the gut wrenching feeling I got from it. It would please me very much if you continued on with this story.

With honest regards,

Allen J Walker

D Ahh~ Entertaining~ Well written~ Interesting~

Good job!

-Shiro

Finally a fic where hollow Ichigo takes over and lives their life better than Ichigo ever could. What an irony, and a tragedy no one will never know. You could post fics like these all year round as far as I'm concerned :P

Hey there!You've got one nice oneshot there.

I like how you described Ichigo's defeat,and Shirosaki's take over on Ichigo's job!

2 thumbs up!:D

Freaked me out. It's not actually stated in the story, but the fact that nobody knows that the new "Ichigo" is a lie is the whole horror in the story for me.

I really love the ending. :D

Usually, everyone would expect him to just flip out and slaughter everyone, I love how you made him a better man than Ichigo was - just happy to be free and alive. It sounds like a really happy ending, but it's really deep - like you gave more character to Hichigo. Like, adding emphasis to the part that just wants to be let free, instead of locked away in the rain.

I realize that Halloween is over, but the way the story was set for Halloween was terrific. I loved it. I loved how you made Hichigo the winner, the ruler, the KING. Good job

This is amazing. Wow. I really do love this. It's such a twist in that it makes so much more sense for Shiro to do, so much less violent than the traditional perception that he just wants to tear the world apart, one could even say it is better this way, and yet it still has that underlying sinsister creepiness of being taken over and losing your life. This really is an amazing piece. Good job.

xD i adored the difference between the cruel Hollow in the inner world and then the changed, more exuberantly happy "Ichigo" at the end. :3 that was well done. ;D poor Ichigo. so frantic and forever to be caged. and that last line was absolutely perfect. i really adored it.

So, okay. Here we go. In my opinion, both the first part and the second were written well. I liked both of them equally. So what's my problem you'll want to know?

The horror you intended to write was great in the inner mind. I like the chase, I like the dialogue, I like the ending. It's chilling. It's good. But... the last paragraph As I mentioned before, I like it. The idea is also right. Mirroring Ichigo's hair and the lefthandedness is good. But after this... I'm sorry to say but the rest sounds like a happy end. I know it's not and you try to show it with the mirror... but the fact that "Ichigo" gets the girl, develops a better relationship to his dad and smiles more don't help it. It is also written in a cheerful spirit it seems. If one were to be really twisted one could think that the hollow comforts/takes care/x Ichigo. Everything after "gaze lovingly" could work like that. You try to give us a creep with the lingering Ichigo. Doesn't work for me. The ending just sums up to all is well (almost) after evil won. Maybe you have an idea how to get the silent chill in the end that was lost. I don't. But even if I read it with an happy ending I still enjoyed it immensly. I hope you're not too mad I'm not creeped out... sorry. Hope you keep your work up to get better.

Greetings, Myrdschaem